I can't take it anymore...so I started a blog


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jgreer35
March 20, 2013, 09:13 PM
Hey folks, I've been reading this forum daily for quite a while now. I've posted a few questions here and there. I can't take it anymore. I've got some things to say so I started a blog. My first post is titled "Teeth of Liberty" and explores the 2nd amendment in the context of the time periord around our founding. Since this is my first blog post I was hoping some of the knowledgeable folks here would be willing to read it and provide any comments. Hopefully if you like it, you might even recommend it.

www.teethofliberty.wordpress.com (http://teethofliberty.wordpress.com)

Thanks everyone.

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LevelHead
March 20, 2013, 09:53 PM
I'm a published author, and I've written a blog for years, so hopefully that adds some weight to my comments.

1) It's too long. Try to keep blog posts to 1500 words at a max, and only that long if you're telling a well crafted story. You're bound to get TL;DR comments at 1800+ words. A great rule for writing is to write the first draft then work to cut out fully 1/2 of the words. 900 words would be a much better length for this.

2) Proof-read before you post. There are many grammar and spelling mistakes. You'll never gain the trust of the reader with mistakes.

3) You're covering too many topics in one post. Try to keep each post succinct and keep to a single point.

4) Stop saying things like "simpleton liberals". If you're trying to change minds, you won't succeed with that language.

5) If you have a point to make, then make it. There are too many quotes from other people. Too many quotes translates into other people thinking for you. One quote per article should be enough unless, of course, it's an article about quotes. :)

Please don't take these comments as an attack. Writing is hard to do well, and my goal is to help you produce better work.

HTH

jgreer35
March 20, 2013, 10:04 PM
Thanks for the comments. Like I said, this is my first time so I'm taking no offense at all. I appreciate the time you took to read it. Maybe I'll break it into parts. I'll work on the grammar as well.

TylerS
March 20, 2013, 10:06 PM
Hi, I think you are on to something. I am a law student and we have just barely finished our seriously in-depth analysis of the 2nd Amendment. There is one point missing about the Second Amendment. The framers wanted the people/militia to be able to protect themselves from foreign invasion. If you haven't read D.C. v. Heller it is really informative. Justice Anton Scalia is a true patriot and truly understands what you are trying to say. I think you would like his opinion and it might inspire you even more. Also, look at the language used in the 2nd Amendment compared, say, to the 4th Amendment. Things that we know about the 4th Amendment such as unreasonable searches and seizures are individual rights. The argument, per se, is whether the right to bear arms is an individual right or an communal right. The language when compared to the 4th is the same. Meaning, the founders meant for the 2nd Amendment to be an individual right.

Squeaky Wheel
March 21, 2013, 02:06 PM
I think you're off to a good start. Very interesting! I'll keep an eye on it.

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