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Letter Critique

Discussion in 'General Gun Discussions' started by BADUNAME4, Apr 25, 2008.

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  1. BADUNAME4

    BADUNAME4 Member

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    Here's my latest. Any opinions are welcome before I send it out. Thanks:

    The right piece at the wrong time. I'll hold for a later date. Thanks for the input.
     
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    I only gave it a very cursory scan, but it's totally unclear who you're writing this to, and what it may be in response to. It's not possible to give a critique of your letter without any background.
     
  3. Treo

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    I have the same question. This reads like a letter to the editor, and as such it isn't bad. I wouldn't make the direct accusations against the unions unless you can back them up.
     
  4. bogie

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    Letter to what?

    If it's a letter to a newspaper editorial page, it's too damn long. Choppy and disjointed too. Pick one concept, and run with it. Don't try to play every position in the ballpark at once.

    hack/n/slash it big time.
     
  5. BADUNAME4

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    Good points.
    It's a Letter in response to all sorts of gun-control wrangling in Philly.
    The slashing has begun.
    Nevermind. I like the original, but will save it for another day.
     
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