Letter Critique

[BADUNAME4]

Here's my latest. Any opinions are welcome before I send it out. Thanks:

The right piece at the wrong time. I'll hold for a later date. Thanks for the input.

 

[atk]

I only gave it a very cursory scan, but it's totally unclear who you're writing this to, and what it may be in response to. It's not possible to give a critique of your letter without any background.

 

[Treo]

I have the same question. This reads like a letter to the editor, and as such it isn't bad. I wouldn't make the direct accusations against the unions unless you can back them up.

 

[bogie]

Letter to what?

If it's a letter to a newspaper editorial page, it's too damn long. Choppy and disjointed too. Pick one concept, and run with it. Don't try to play every position in the ballpark at once.

hack/n/slash it big time.

 

[BADUNAME4]

Good points.
It's a Letter in response to all sorts of gun-control wrangling in Philly.
The slashing has begun.
Nevermind. I like the original, but will save it for another day.