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Student work at my schoole.

Discussion in 'General Gun Discussions' started by Oleg Volk, Aug 23, 2005.

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  1. Oleg Volk

    Oleg Volk Moderator Emeritus

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    This came from a Photoshop/Illustrator class assignment to make a catalog or a magazine spread. The author is an ex-SWAT officer.
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  2. Standing Wolf

    Standing Wolf Member in memoriam

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    It looks good. Items of this sort always need lots of air to keep the eye from feeling overwhelmed.

    "Step8" needs a space. Periods are followed by single rather than double spaces.
     
  3. ctdonath

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    Nicely done. I like highly visual explainations.

    One suggestion: the gloves should be replaced by either no gloves or solid-colored ones. I had to stare at some of the inserts for several seconds to figure out what was what, especially when the gun was at unexpected angles. High-contrast unfamiliar ill-defined shapes are hard to parse.
     
  4. Cacique500

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    Looks ok - but did I miss the step where you remove the magazine and make sure the chamber is empty?? :uhoh:
     
  5. Bobo

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    Nice layout, photography, and typography, but ditto on the gloves. Very hard to to see the where the gloves end and the gun parts start. Solid colored gloves or no gloves would be much better.
     
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    Yeah, the gloves really get in the way, especially in the inset picture by the grip safety. Took my eyes a little while to seperate gloves from gun. That and Step 1 should have been to properly clear the gun. Otherwise a fine job. I'd give in 80% (-10 for the unloading, -5 for the gloves, -5 for using his wife rather than their friend's hot 18 year old daughter - I mean she's reasonably pretty, but it's just not the same).
     
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    Some humble suggestions:

    Step 1 should be "clear the weapon."

    Gloves should either go or be replaced by solid-color ones.

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    >Never mind that third suggestion. Oops.<
     
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    dude - that's her elbow.
     
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    How come I always get yelled at if I use a "regular flat blade screwdriver" on any part of a pistol, but this guy does not get yelled at? (Step #6) I know it is a home repair, but :(

    Not that I regret getting a good set of gunsmith screwdrivers that do not chew up the screwhead and the steel around it, or that hollow-ground blades work so much better for just about everything :D .

    And +1 on the clear-and-check for step #1.

    stay safe.

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    Good that it's gun related, but I give low marks for overall effectiveness. Very busy, very hard to understand. Inset photos are extremely hard to decipher.

    He lost sight of the goal, which should be to communicate effectively, rather than to just use photoshop...
     
  11. hso

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    Too busy. The Star could have been reduced to a shadow background and the inset images could have been expanded.

    Patterned colored gloves make the insets difficult to sort out.

    Some of the instructions are not detailed enough and tend to be "whats" instead of "hows".
     
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