I like the first one better as is, but I'd also like the second one without the extra wording. The headers combined with the pictures make the point pretty clear that you're going to be waiting on the police to show up, so the extra stuff isn't necessary. Plus, the header at the top of the second poster is more personal and the one at the bottom makes the reader actually answer a question about themselves.
Terse or verbose?
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Mrs. Armoredman
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True,direct and to the point. Excellent Oleg...
bogie
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I like both...
HOWEVER... (sound of Oleg cocking back the slap-fist...)
First one:
Change top to "Cops Seldom Arrive in Time" and let reader fill in the rest.
Both: Separate the boomstick better - I'd go with a white or light yellow box background, with bolder black type.
Second:
It needs more "If" stuff... And I think it's a GREAT poster for pamphleting a campus, that sort of thing...
In fact, I think I like #2 better... But with the #1 headlines...
(one rule: Don't ask people a question. Instead, tell them what to do.)
HOWEVER... (sound of Oleg cocking back the slap-fist...)
First one:
Change top to "Cops Seldom Arrive in Time" and let reader fill in the rest.
Both: Separate the boomstick better - I'd go with a white or light yellow box background, with bolder black type.
Second:
It needs more "If" stuff... And I think it's a GREAT poster for pamphleting a campus, that sort of thing...
In fact, I think I like #2 better... But with the #1 headlines...
(one rule: Don't ask people a question. Instead, tell them what to do.)
Wakal
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I like the classic line: "When seconds count, cops are minutes away"
Alex
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davera
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Add a phrase to the Terse version "When seconds count, the police are only minutes away"
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