Halfgone: I volunteer for the task. Most things I do badly, but one of the few exceptions is my writing ability.
What would I put in it? First, I would love to see 922(o) deleted but this is not remotely on the table. This is a must-pass bill and deleting 922(o) would be a poison pill and those two things do not go together.
My proposal is simple:
As written, this allows the Feds to designate security contractors who can bypass 922(o). Great. Let's give this same option to the state governments, to do with as they see fit. If the State of California wants to let private security companies do some guard work for some state facility, then they should be able to issue a permit or authorization. We just leave this open-ended! Let's not talk about it too much, but let's word it in such a way so that if, say, Montana decides to issue these authorizations to not just security companies, but perhaps any company, or maybe any individual, or whatever... well, this law will let Montana do that. In fact I can easily imagine the state of California giving these authorizations out to movie production companies too. We should keep it conservative and limited; Montana-state authorized people should not be able to bypass other state laws, like Fed contractors can.
The cool thing about this is that, on the surface, it looks like this is just adding more security options, beyond just Fed contractors. Everyone wants more security, right? But if we leave it undefined as to who the state can authorize, it creates the possibility that some particularly pro-gun state will start issuing these authorizations to all CCW holders, or all FFLs (including C&R), or perhaps to all citizens.
That's what I think we should do. It's a very small one-line change, it does something good without doing it in an obvious way, and it is realistic. It will only help us if some states decide to play along, but I'm pretty sure some of them will, and that's the best and most we can hope for right now.
If one of our more legalistic contributors would come up with the legalese, I'll write it as a letter.
Let's aim for a small victory, just make a crack in 922(o).