Domestic Enemies: Excerpts on the Web

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Finally!!!

Six chapters from Domestic Enemies are available on the web at http://enemiesforeignanddomestic.com/excerpts.htm . You can also read the first 18 chapters of Enemies Foreign and Domestic for free at that page.

I'm only 10 paragraphs into the first chapter, and I already want to sleep with the lights on again (like I did after reading the first book, Enemies Foreign and Domestic). I'm looking forward to the rest.

Author Matthew Bracken posts here under the nome de plume of Travis McGee.


Here's what Matt posted back on May 4th, 2004 about this book:

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For you EFAD readers, here's the brief background of my sequel, which will bring back Ranya as a primary character. "Domestic Enemies" takes place five years after the end of "Enemies Foreign and Domestic," or notionally about 2014. The action happens between Oklahoma and Southern California, but much of it occurs in New Mexico.

The state government of New Mexico has been taken over by nominally Democrat Party Hispanic radicals of the MeCha and La Raza variety, in wildly rigged “touch screen†elections. The NM electoral vote helps to put the ‘rat President over the top, so as you can imagine, no election fraud investigation is forthcoming.

One of the new radical state government’s top agenda items is “land reform.†Large Anglo-owned properties will be confiscated on the pretext that their original deeds and titles are invalid, under the Treaty of Guadeloupe Hidalgo, dating from the 1840s. In order to enforce the “land reform†the governor creates a new force, the “Milicia de Nuevo Mexico,†and arms them with surplus M-16A1 rifles from the state guard armories. (The actual NM National Guard is all deployed to the war in East Slambamistan.) The stage is set for a bloody showdown between Anglo ranchers who refuse to leave their ancestral lands, and the Milicia de Nuevo Mexico.

The state government passes “Solo Espanol†laws, in reaction after some other US states pass English-only laws. Police and other government employees who cannot pass difficult oral and written Spanish proficiency tests are fired. Milicia-manned checkpoints are pervasive, searching the cars of Anglos for illegal firearms. The checkpoints are a form of ethnic harassment, part of the new government’s unspoken plan for the ethnic cleansing of “Nuevo Mexico.†(The Indian tribes were bought off as part of the rigged state elections.)

"Voluntarios" from Mexico and Central and South America (as well as left-wing radical gringos) are coming to NM for land and a chance to poke a sharp stick in Uncle Sam’s eye. Sort of a Barcelona 1935 atmosphere. Reds, "blacks" (anarchists) and lunatics of all stripes.

Armed volunteers of the Jim Bowie/Davy Crockett stripe are also heading to Nuevo Mexico to support the threatened Anglo ranchers; some of these "right wing militia" patriot types will be incorporated into the plot. But I'm not going to make it totally black and white, i.e., "Anglos good, Hispanics bad." I'm going to strive to include many of motives, pure and base, on both sides.

One major character will be a demoralized and disgusted FBI agent in Albuquerque. He's getting all of this incredible information on Chinese subversion ops money, communist infiltrators from Peru to Cuba, but Washington FBI HQ does NOT want to hear about it. DC is in full denial mode. As long as the govt of NM mouths the right USA words, DC will ignore the revolution going on in NM at the street and ranch level.

Plus, to make it worse, HQ keeps sending nonsensical orders for the FBI agents in Albuquerque to investigate who else but....the right wing ranchers and others, who are resisting the NM govts "land reform" (confiscation) efforts! Don't mind the Chinese and other communist agents; go after the right wing "domestic terrorists" who are violating the strict federal gun laws and other new laws! The frustrated FBI agent lives in this insane PC world, where his DC masters are totally out of touch with reality. (Sort of like today.)
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PS - Matt, if you're reading this: stop surfing the web and get back to finishing the book! :)
 
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In case you have not yet been convinced to follow the links to Matt's web site, here's a few paragraphs that should get you hooked:

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DOMESTIC ENEMIES CHAPTER ONE

“Yo, Penny! What the hell you doing, girl? Get your scrawny ass back here!â€

The woman was new; it was only her second day among the camp’s female detainees. She still had the boot camp buzz-cut which marked her as fresh from the “Tombs†in Illinois.

The D-Camp admin staff usually did this with pale-skinned white girls: they put them straight out into the fields under the blast-furnace Oklahoma sun. The new prisoner had gamely attempted to keep up with the line of twenty women, weeding her row of staked cabbages with a hoe, but her hands were already cratered with broken blisters.

She walked back down the narrow file to where Big Kendra was waiting. Ranya anticipated what was going to happen next.

“Penny, are all the skinny white girls back in Maine as useless as you?â€

Ranya kept moving her hoe, while glancing over her shoulder at the drama playing out behind the field crew. The new woman was half the size of Big Kendra, with her broad butt and ample chest straining against her khaki uniform.

“What is this here, woman? What do you see here?†Big Kendra carried a long rake handle when she was on guard duty in the fields; now she was using it to point at the ground between the cabbage rows.

The new detainee was shaking visibly, but Ranya couldn’t hear her reply. The woman turned and looked back up the line for the missed weed, leaning over to see where the guard had pointed. The guard moved up close behind, looming over her.

“Are you blind too? That’s a big ole’ ragweed—ain’t that what you’re here for?â€

Ranya cringed as the guard booted the new woman down onto her face.

“Now get back on the line, and don’t let me catch you slacking off again!â€

Big Kendra was one of the most offhandedly brutal guards in D-Camp. The six foot tall Philadelphian took special delight in humiliating the new detainees, especially soft suburban housewives from the opposite end of the pigmentation spectrum. After a few months of interrogation, they arrived at D-Camp in unmarked “moving vans†as pale as Pillsbury dough-boys, and were immediately sent out to do field work beneath the unrelenting sun. No hats were provided, and their faces and shorn heads burned an agonizing lobster red. No gloves were supplied, and without calluses, their hands became painfully blistered working the short-handled hoes.

Ranya had seen the black Amazon called Big Kendra put the boot to many new detainees, as part of her own personal “breaking in†procedure.

The new prisoner stumbled back, and took her place among the women working their way up the lines of dusty plants. She was on the next row from Ranya, sobbing quietly.

“It’s not my fault, it’s a mistake, I shouldn’t even be here! It’s all a mistake! But nobody will listen. Nobody will listen!â€

This was the usual lament of the new Article 14 detainees. It was always a mistake. An old tune by an Australian band ran through Ranya’s mind. “It’s a mistake!†It was always the same heartrending song. “It’s a mistake!â€

“My husband disappeared last year, just disappeared! Went to work, and never came home. No word, not one word! Then last March the police came, and found guns in our attic. Assault weapons and sniper rifles, they said! I didn’t even know they were there! I swear to God, I had nothing to do with them! But nobody would listen! Now who’s taking care of my children? It’s all a mistake, but nobody will listen! And now I don’t even know where my children are…†Tears slid dirty tracks down her face....
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Go to http://enemiesforeignanddomestic.com/excerptde11.htm to read the rest. If you haven't already read Enemies Foreign and Domestic, go to http://enemiesforeignanddomestic.com/excerpt1.htm
 
EFOD is a great read. I've got an autographed copy of the first edition. I am really eagerly awaiting the sequel. Been nudging Matt to keep at it and I told him he has a ton of fans waiting for the sequel.

I really, really recommend his first book, Enemies Foreign and Domestic. You can order it from most bookstores and off the Web.
 
Interesting but in real need of fact checking....staked cabbage...actually growing under the unrelenting Oklahoma sun...?

Never saw a staked cabbage!
Can't imagine how a cold weather plant like cabbage could take the heat described w/o bolting for any peroid of time letting it live long enough to require hoeing....perhaps smelling the stink of cabbage rotting after they bolted was part of the punishment, and punishment it would be.

Just the farm boy coming out in me :D

S-
 
I dunno, sounds like more hispanophobic claptrappery better suited for free republic.
Oh no, the evil mexicans are coming, lock up your kids and call in the militia, gimme a break.
OTOH, I'll still buy the book.

atek3
 
I can vouch for Matt that he is hard at work on his second book, Domestic Enemies. He expects (hope) to be fininshed by the end of the year.
 
Bummer!

For me at least a SHTF novel needs to have at least some basis in reality.

The EFAD scenario, the stadium massacre and all the subsequent actions, seemed plausible to me. Even the Unintended Consequences SHTF scenario, IMO, could be pulled off in real life by the right type of people.

Unfortunately the Domestic Enemies scenario as described in the original post is pure nonsense. I can imagine the possibility of a state's government being taken over as described (just barely) but the rest of what happens in the described story line would never be permitted. Forming a militia to attack land owners? I cannot imagine the Federal Government ever allowing that.

It seems that Domestic Enemies probably will not be added to my reading list. I enjoy reading Fantasy novels a great deal but the SHTF genre in my opinion becomes unreadable once it departs into the realm of fantasy.
 
Selfdefenz:
I don't know much about agriculture in western Oklahoma in June, that's for sure! Maybe you can give me suggestions. What I'm trying to get at is that with the national economy collapsing, and the camp's budget fixed in old inflated dollars, the detainees must work to eat. The camp budget won't cover the cost of buying fresh vegetables, etc, so they must run their own farm and livestock operation.

So what's more plausible in Oklahoma in June, assuming non-mechanized prison labor?

Thanks,
Matt/Travis
 
Werewolf:
The scenario presented in DE doesn't take place today or tomorrow, but ten or more years from now. The economy is collapsing, the dollar is almost worthless, credit cards etc are not accepted, and the cities are imploding into anarchy and ethnic civil war.

That is the national background. With all that going on, the financially busted federal govt. will have its hands completely full protecting and maintaining critical infrastructure, such as train routes, highways, electrical lines and pipelines etc which are all passing through urban areas, which are slowly turning into Sarajevos and Mogadishus.

With all of that as the ambient political climate, the federal govt will, I believe, totally ignore lunacy in a "backwater" state like NM, as long as the national labs are not directly threatened. They will have more important fires to put out in Los Angeles, Detroit, etc.

Anyway, if you've read EFAD, you might want to read what I posted from DE, remembering that it's 10 or more from now.

Matt
 
So what's more plausible in Oklahoma in June, assuming non-mechanized prison labor?
In western OK, in the summer? Lots of desert, rock and tumble weeds out there (think texas panhandle).

Maybe wheat - if you're talkin' west/central OK - lots'a wheat grown out there.

Lots'a cattle in West OK but that doesn't fit if the prison farm has to grow plants and not animals.
 
I'm pretty sure they grow cotton around Lubbock, which isn't too far from the OK panhandle. Looking in Google, it looks like barley, corn, and sorghum grow in the panhandle. Cotton is mentioned, but in the SW OK area, so maybe not in the panhandle.
 
Corn will grow about anywhere.

But then again, in 2014, it is probably genetic mutant cabbage. :)

I will buy this book as soon as it comes out. I enjoyed the first one. Not just as a gun related book, but because Travis is honestly a pretty darn good author (and I'm a book snob). He creates good characters, puts them in interesting situations, and has a good knack for pace and plotting. I found EFAD a much better read than many of the mainstream thrillers.

A situation can be considered far-fetched, and you can still have an excellent story. A good rule of thumb is that an author gets one major departure from reality freebie to set up the story, and then needs to stick to reality after that. A La Mecha revolution in a crumbling America is not that far fetched overall, if the background has been set up to allow for it.

I will be interested to see how it plays out, especially since many of the Hispanics that I know, absolutely hate the La Mecha Aztlan whackos, about as much as your average suburban Anglo hates nazi skinheads. :)
 
the rest of what happens in the described story line would never be permitted. Forming a militia to attack land owners? I cannot imagine the Federal Government ever allowing that.

There's probably some white African farmers that thought the same thing at one time...
 
Correia:
Hmmm...maybe I'll change the field to corn. How tall is corn in Mid June? It can't be tall enough to hide in, or the prisoners would not be allowed to work it the way I'm laying it out. I think beets might be another possibility. Or I can just make the dang field drip irrigated, and run some flex hose lines through it! It's just to supplement the feeding of a couple hundred women prisoners, so a few acres of each crop would be enough.
 
EFAD was a great read.

I hope the author adds more specific "howto" practical-tactical information in his next novel. The first one had some pretty good scenarios where you could gain some info on tactics, but more is needed.

I think a pro-freedom pro-second amendment book geared towards freedomholics should have more information to defend these rights if they are threatened in the future.

We're not all ex-Navy seals :)
 
AK47Nevada:

About the level of gun talk and tactics: I have to do a balancing act. Too much detailed gun talk, and the readers who just like to read a thriller get bored and lost. Too little, and the shooters and survivalists are not satisfied. I would rather go a little light on it, and keep the plot moving rapidly. Pacing is everything. It has to work as a novel first, otherwise not enough folks will read it for it to make any difference.

Matt
 
It has to work as a novel first, otherwise not enough folks will read it for it to make any difference.

Understandable. What's the possibility of a "how-to" book of some type for the hardcore audience after you complete the "trilogy", Hmmmm?

I still have your "Art of the Cache" on my hard drive. It's a real gem. The "Sailboat Escape Pod Option" is interesting also, but not too practical for a land-locked hillbilly like me :D .
 
And no offense to Matt, but if I want to read a book about tactics, I'm going to read old field manuals. If I pick up a novel, I want a novel. :)

I couldn't say on corn height, we grew corn where I'm from, but my job revolved around cows and alfalfa, so I'm not much help there.
 
Travis,

I just realized my noon time post did not post.

I nominated corn and beans (food) and an additional crop of cotton (non-food). Cotton is weird plant as I understand it. Some of the GM stuff can grow where the non-GM stuff can't. Cotton has much about it to engender hate when it comes in contact with human skin IMO.

I'm thinking 200 women trying to grow as much food as possible for direct consumption and a bunch more for animal feed = maybe 500 acres in good soil/good climate and perhaps 1000 in problematic areas. And that would not be a diverse diet. I offer that probably useless observation in case definition of the size of their World /compound figures in the plot. :D

All you farmers chime in.

Best luck Travis and I'm going to read your book!
I love Lights Out.

S-
 
Unfortunately the Domestic Enemies scenario as described in the original post is pure nonsense. I can imagine the possibility of a state's government being taken over as described (just barely) but the rest of what happens in the described story line would never be permitted. Forming a militia to attack land owners? I cannot imagine the Federal Government ever allowing that.

As of 15 years ago, I don't think anyone in South Africa or even Zimbabwe would have imagined a similar scenario happening to them either.
 
I hope the author adds more specific "howto" practical-tactical information in his next novel. The first one had some pretty good scenarios where you could gain some info on tactics, but more is needed.

I think a pro-freedom pro-second amendment book geared towards freedomholics should have more information to defend these rights if they are threatened in the future.

I disagree. I'm not interested in authors who write just to show off how much they know. Go read Tom *cough*ncy or *cough*.


Besides, the problem with getting your information from novels is separating the fact from the fiction. That's one of the things that really irritated me about Unintended Consequences. Clayton Cramer hit the nail on the head in his three-star Amazon review (July 15, 1998):

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Let me carp about something else. Ross's book is filled with historical facts. Some of them I know are clearly correct. (My MA is in History, and my published books and journal articles are such that I have researched some of the events to which Unintended Consequences refers.) Some of the facts referred to in Unintended Consequences are incorrect, though generally minor details, such as the date the Sullivan Law took effect in New York State, or more arguable than Mr. Ross suggests. There are a number of fascinating assertions made in Unintended Consequences that, if they are true, need footnotes, and if they are historic imagination, that would be useful as well. I fear that too many people are going to assume that because much of this novel is about real events, real people, and real cases, that all of it is -- and it's hard to distinguish the historical facts from the imagined details in Ross's work.
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Contrast that with Enemies Foreign and Domestic, which simply delivered a great story without asking us to believe a lot of things. That Matt actually does know his hardware and tactics is simply a bonus which makes his work better.
 
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