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Strange... when I've been reading through, the music I put on is the soundtrack for Hero, the soundtrack for Aliens, and the fight scene stuff is usually some fast-paced goth-industrial stuff.

If I had to come up with my own track listing, it'd be something somewhat along the lines of this...

Downtime/ "Romantic" scenes:
Angel - Massive Attack
DuClare Chateau - Deus Ex / Alex Brandon
Devotion - Sonic Infidel

Fight/ Chase music:
Send Me An Angel - Zeromancer (cover of Real Life song)
Into the Fog - Master and Commander: The Far Side of the World
Futile Escape and Bishop's Countdown - Aliens

Narration and scenery:
Threat - Ka by Renee Dupiere
Host of Seraphim - Dead Can Dance

A good deal of it is pretty obscure, but if you know what they all are, it makes sense. :eek:

Although... sm's list looks pretty good too. A modern espionage movie with a classic rock soundtrack--what's not to love? :)
 
Leaving as many fuzzy details as possible, I recounted how I had been reconnoitering Adar’s villa, and had seen her being held captive. The girl looked kind of out of it, disoriented, angry and scared. She was still under the influence of whatever drug they had given her. And her finger was resting on the trigger that decided whether one of my crew lived or died.

“You expect me to believe that?” she shouted, blinking rapidly. Reaper cringed as she banged the Glock into the base of his skull.

“Look, we’re not your enemies. See?” I slowly placed my .45 on the table and stepped away. “Carl, put your gun down.”

“But—“

“Do it!” I ordered. Even worse than her killing Reaper, would be the noise. Our compound was crowded with rental villas, and I had no doubt that Qatari fuzz would be crawling all over a call of gunshots within minutes. Carl grudgingly responded, and placed his CZ on the floor. “My name is Lorenzo. I saw that you were in danger, and I helped. I brought you back here, because the streets are covered in cops, and all hell has broken loose out there. Let me help you.” Why had I brought her to our hideout? Damn needless complications.

“Okay, I don’t think you’re with those guys that grabbed me, but who are you, really?” She was scared, but she was hard, and her grip on the gun didn’t loosen. “You’re an American at least.”

“You first,” I suggested soothingly. Plus it gave me a moment to try to think of some sort of plausible cover story.

“I’m with the US government,” she snapped.

Oh, not cool. “Good.” I said as calmly as possible. If I had brought a fed or a spy back to our hideout, it was either screw the mission, or kill her. Neither one sounded like a good option. “We’re on the same side. We’re on a top-secret mission. And if you blow Special Agent Reaper’s brains all over the walls, you’re going to have some explaining to do to your superiors, and I probably won’t be able to get the security deposit back on this apartment.”

When you have to lie, you might as well reach for the stars.

“Are you Dead Six?” she asked calmly, but her eyes had narrowed to dangerous slits and her teeth were a hard white line on her darkly tanned face. I paused, not sure how to answer. “Are you with Dead Six?” she repeated.

Fifty-fifty chance on this one. “Yes.”

“Die ***** you ******!” she shouted as she stepped back from Reaper. The muzzle of the Glock was swinging towards me. The 9mm hole looked unnaturally large as the contents of my stomach turned to ice. I threw myself to the side, but I already knew it wouldn’t be fast enough.

Click.

Reaper disdained holsters, and since he tended to just shove the gun in his pants, he usually carried chamber empty. Carl and I called him a sissy for doing that, but as I hit the floor, I was mighty glad Reaper was a sissy.

The girl knew guns, and she instinctively reached up with her left hand and began to rack the slide. The world seemed to dial down into slow motion as Reaper spun and charged her, his stringy black hair rising like a halo. He hit her hard, and they both disappeared into the living room.

I was up in a flash, moving towards the scuffle. In the corner of my vision, I saw Carl scooping up his gun. Reaper and the girl were wrestling for the Glock, the muzzle pointed upwards between their faces. He was much taller, but she was stronger than she looked.

Beginning to lose the struggle, she let go of the gun, and threw her elbow into Reaper’s temple. His head snapped back like his neck was a spring and our techie went to the ground in a heap, but at least he took the Glock with him.

Carl had drawn down on her. “Don’t shoot!” I shouted, as I leapt over Reaper. “Too loud!” The girl had gone into a crouch, hands open in front of her face. Carl turned and disappeared from the room. Thanks for the help there, buddy. Apparently this chick knew how to fight, and I didn’t like hitting girls.

“Just calm d—“ she cut me off with a kick towards my groin. I swept one hand down to block, but it had just been a faint. She hit me with a back fist on my cheek hard enough to rattle my teeth. That hurt. I stepped back, eyes watering, and cracked my knuckles one handed. “Oh, it’s gonna be like that, huh?”

“You Dead Six ******* aren’t going to take me alive,” she spat. She charged, throwing jabs. She was good, but I was better. I dodged, and swept them aside, waiting for a clean shot. She was launching knees and elbows like a Thai kickboxer on speed. Suddenly, Reaper’s heavy metal music began to blare, painfully loud. The speakers on the computer probably near overload. What the hell?

Carl came storming back into the room. He had my 1911, and was screwing my sound suppressor onto the end of the threaded muzzle. It was difficult to hear him over the noise. “I’m too old for this hand to hand nonsense.” He raised the .45 and fired. The Doha phonebook sitting on the couch exploded into confetti. The THUMP of the silenced .45 was barely discernable over the wailing guitars. He turned the gun on the girl. “Cool down, missy, or the next one’s in your head.”

She raised her hands over her head in a position of surrender. I punched her in the stomach, knocking the wind out her. Violence against women doesn’t count when they start it, and I wasn’t going to trust her as far as I could throw her. Somebody banged on the other side of the living room wall. Our neighbors were probably cursing those damn next door Americans.

“You got her, chief?” Carl asked with a grin. “I’m gonna turn this garbage down. Kids today, Reaper, how can you listen to this noise?” Our techie moaned on the floor in response.

“Reaper, you okay?” I asked. The girl had gotten to her hands and knees. Flicking open my Benchmade, I placed it against her neck. She felt the steel there, and froze, knowing that this fight was over. Reaper grunted that he would live. “Good. Grab some rope.”

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“Okay, let’s try this again, with out all the hitting and shooting and stuff. Who are you, and why were you being held by Adar’s men?”

The girl was sitting on the loveseat, hands tied behind her back, and ankles tied together. The music was turned down, I had my suppressed 1911 in my hand, Carl had a beer, and Reaper was holding an ice pack against his head. “No wonder they drugged her,” he muttered.

She answered sullenly, realizing that she might as well cooperate. “My name’s Jill... Jill DelToro. I used to work at the American embassy here in Doha.”

“Used to? Who were you with? FBI? CIA? NSA?”

“Well... Department of Agriculture. Before they fired me.”

I raised one eyebrow. “Okay then. Please tell me that was some sort of cover, and you’re some sort of super spy or something?” I didn’t want to think that somebody from the Department of Cows and Plows had almost been the death of my team of professional killers.

“No, that’s Rob Clancy stuff. I was... well... I was an intern.”

“Tom Clancy,” Reaper corrected. “Intern? What the ****?”

“You got beat up by an intern,” Carl laughed.

“I’m working on my Masters, and was doing a tour of US aid programs around the middle-east. Did you know they actually have dairy farms in Saudi Arabia?”

“Fascinating. Stick to the subject.” I ordered, gesturing with my .45 for emphasis.

“I found out about something that I wasn’t supposed to. I kind of blundered into your group. Next thing I knew, some of you bastards were ransacking my apartment, looking for me. My passport was lost, the embassy guards tried to arrest me, had to beat one of them up to get away. I had heard of somebody that could help me get out of the country, and that’s when those crazy guys grabbed me and stuck a needle in my arm. I woke up here.” She sighed. “I swear, I don’t know hardly anything about Dead Six, but I know you plan to kill me, so let’s get this over with. I’m not going to beg.”

“Tell me what you know about Dead Six first.”

“I overheard some people arguing about it at the embassy. They had left the door to the quiet room open. All I know is that it’s some secret death squad that isn’t supposed to exist. Look, it isn’t my fault your boss is sloppy. He freaked out. Told me to keep my mouth shut, and I did. I promise I wouldn’t have told anyone. I guess he changed his mind just to be safe. So let’s do this you ***** **** *******.”

“Did she just call us what I think she called us?” Reaper asked.

“Spanish is close to Portuguese, so I think so.” Carl chuckled approvingly. “Nice.”

“Calm down. We’re not Black Flag, or Dead Six, or Ninja Force Alpha, or whatever, and we’re not going to kill you.”

“Really? Who are you?” sudden hope in her voice. She studied the pictures and maps on the walls, and the model building on the table. “Wait a second, you guys are criminals.” Jill was certainly sharp.

And I could see how she could come in handy. I was short handed for phase three.

“Yes.” I pulled out my knife and flicked it open. “And if you promise to quit hitting us and taking my people hostage, I’ll let you loose. But if you try to run off, I’m going to have to shoot you, okay?”

“I promise.”

“Jill, is it?” She nodded. I proceeded to cut the rope around her wrists. “The way I see it, you have a problem. You’ve been marked for death by some sort of black op. Official channels will only hurt you, not help you. Doha has gone crazy. There’s a war going on, and you’re in the middle of it. If the government finds you, then you’re dead. If the Qatari secret police find you, then you’re dead. And if you get picked up by the kind of people I saved you from tonight, you are worse than dead. You will need the assistance of, shall we say, a criminal element, to get out of this country alive. Preferably honest, and dare I say, charming criminals, versus the standard underachievers who gravitate towards that career field.”

She rubbed her wrists. “And you know where I can find some people like this, I assume?”

“Perhaps. We have a very difficult job to do, and I think that you might be helpful. You don’t have any moral qualms about helping us out, in exchange for us getting you out of the country, do you? Considering that the kind of people I rob are the kind of people who want you dead.”

“I’m morally flexible,” Jill answered after a long pause. “Promise to get me someplace safe, and I’m in.”

“You can’t be serious, chief.” Reaper stated. The side of his head was turning a nasty shade of blue and yellow.

Carl began to laugh, a deep, rumbling belly laugh. The mercenary did not laugh much.

“What’s so funny?” I asked.

“We got us an intern.”

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I came to a few conclusions about our mission. The shooters that had whacked Adar had not stolen the codebook on purpose. It was only through stupid chance that they had looted Adar’s open safe. They were killers, not thieves. A picture was beginning to emerge of what was going on behind the curtain in supposedly peaceful Qatar. It was either a black op, or a rogue op, but somebody had declared war on the terrorist supporters here.

It had started with the assassination of Al-Falal. Only through a whole lot of creative scrambling on our part had we saved phase one. Then murders and bombings all over the city, causing the police to tighten up security, and really messing up my job, the hit on Adar had been the culmination, and that massacre had driven the police into a frenzy. It was only by some damnable coincidence that this operation was taking place right here, right now, and really complicating my life.

Dead Six. So secret that somebody at the US embassy was willing to kill a twenty-five year old intern over it. And I had to find them. The clock was ticking. Big Eddie was a ruthless crime lord, and I knew that he was not bluffing when he promised to kill our families. And Dead Six was standing in my way.

This was really starting to make me mad.

The other conclusion was that Jill DelToro had a real future as a criminal. Reaper had hacked her file from the Qatari police database, and sure enough, she was on the To Do list. Under my tutelage, she had changed her appearance and public demeanor to look more like the local laborer population. You have to understand that in Qatar, most of the work is done by Indonesians and Philippinos. Using Reaper’s forged documents, Jill was no longer an easy mark, and after a few days of laying low, I had put her to work.

“Lorenzo, you aren’t going to believe what I found,” she whispered as she slid into the booth across from me. We were in some cheesy American style hamburger place called Johnny Rockets. I was dressed like a laborer too, and we had spent the day asking around, looking for clues about our mystery shooters. “The girl at the movie theater, she recognized the tall shooter when I showed her the picture.”

“Good work.” I had to admit. Jill had surprised me, and rather than reacting to the ruination of her life at the hands of an uncaring government, she was adapting rather well. At first I had been worried that she would try to run, but so far she had given no indication of that. I still made her wear a blind fold when we drove to and from our compound. Every time I let my paranoia down in this business, it inevitably came back to bite me. “Anything new?”

“He came in with a really pretty woman. The ticket girl said that she had very nice shoes and looked like an American movie star. They watched Alexander. She hasn’t seen them since.”

I shrugged. We were getting close. “He also bought her an expensive necklace. Some of the shopkeepers said that they remembered because they dared to have a public display of affection. You just don’t do that around here.”

“This still doesn’t tell us where he lives,” Jill said. She had a predatory grin as she spoke. The waitress left our food and quickly left. The Qatari’s didn’t encourage talkative help.

I took another bite of my burger. “You’re starting to enjoy this stuff, aren’t you?”

“Well, I have to admit. It is certainly different. So when are you going to tell me what your job is? I’ve proven myself, haven’t I? What is it that you need me for? I know it’s not just talking to people at the mall.”

“Not yet. If we don’t find the codebook, then the mission gets scrapped. Then we get you out of the country, and my crew tries to hide their families before Big Eddie finds out and kills them all. If that happens, you don’t need, or want to know what we were supposed to do.” I took a drink from the really bad milkshake, must be because of those Saudi cows. “So, question for you. Where did you learn to fight like that? Reaper’s face is still purple.”

She shrugged. “My dad was a Marine in the PI. He met my mom there. When he retired, he opened a martial arts studio in California. I pretty much grew up beating on people.”

“Cool. What’s he doing now?”

“They died. Car accident.”

“Sorry. You have anybody else?”

“Brother was killed by an IED in Iraq last year. That was everybody.”

There was a long, uncomfortable pause. “I’m sorry.”

“Well, it could be worse. Look at you guys. Maybe family is just a liability, something people can use against you.” She went back to her lunch. It was a sucky way to look at life, but in my current situation, I couldn’t think of a way to correct her. I changed the subject.

“We’re getting close to these shooters. Dead Six is getting sloppy. They’re being seen in public. Local tattoo parlors have been doing a bunch of grim reapers with sixes on muscle bound Caucasians. They’re spending money, and starting to talk. It’s only a matter of time before we find them. Stupid cowboys.”

“What are you going to do then? Kill them?” she asked hopefully.

“Look, just because they want to murder you, doesn’t make them bad people, its all just business. In the grand scheme of things, my life, your life, doesn’t mean anything to the big players. It’s nothing personal...” I trailed off. Like some bizarre scene from a Tarantino movie, there was the man, the tall shooter, sliding into a booth at the far end of the restaurant, next to a beautiful woman. He wore glasses, and looked way too young to be such a hardened killer. “It’s just business... Jill, act casual. Don’t be obvious, but our shooter decided he wants a burger.”

“No way.” She turned around slowly, as if she was stretching, then turned back. “He doesn’t look like much, does he? Oh, this is so neat.” She actually giggled.

So this was the face of Dead Six. I studied him, trying to learn what I could. The young couple was obviously in love, and I could see why they had been memorable to the Doha shopkeepers. Horrible field craft. Occasionally, he would look around, scanning the rest of the patrons, the automatic check of the hunter, condition yellow. I made sure he didn’t catch me looking.

After half an hour, they left, holding hands. Waiting until they were out the door, I stood, tossed down a pile of Riyals, and followed, already running scenarios through my head about how I could take this kid down and get my book back.

Nothing personal. It’s just business.

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We sat in the van, across from the unremarkable compound, that we had tailed the shooter to earlier in the week. The heat was like a stifling blanket, super heating the air in my lungs. I was dressed in non-descript khaki clothing. Sweat dripped down my back and pooled in my armpits. Tonight was the night.

We had taken turns staking the place out over the last few days, getting a feel for the routine. Security on the exterior was lax, but was to be expected, so as to keep a low profile. Traffic in and out was heavy, with an almost constant stream of vehicles coming and going. The vast majority of the occupants were Caucasian.

Reaper had procured satellite pictures of the compound. There were twenty-four separate apartments. His hacking into the Doha city databases told us which ones were using power and water, and a map began to form. The fifteen foot walls prevented us from using our parabolic microphone, and apparently there were no land phone lines in use inside the complex that we could hack into and listen through their receivers. We picked up multiple cell phones in use, but they were encrypted beyond our ability to crack in the amount of time we had available.

After a few days of watching, a plan began to formulate. Reaper had prepared the Little Bird for its flight, then set it free. The LB was a five foot wide, remote controlled, flying wing. Colored light blue, and actually illuminated from below by what looked like twinkling white Christmas lights, it was virtually invisible on a clear day and totally silent at altitude. Unless Dead Six was running active radar, which our snooping had not revealed, they would never even know we were there.

LB had cost me two hundred and thirty thousand dollars. It was a top of the line piece of surveillance equipment, and it was worth every penny. The cameras could read news paper headlines, and it could stay on station for hours at a time. It had taken four flights before we had gotten lucky and caught our shooter standing on a specific balcony. Building number Three, room Two. Got you sucker.

Now it was time, going in quiet and low profile. I chamber checked my STI Duty CT .45, with a 4.15 inch slide with an extended, threaded barrel. It rode on my strong side hip in a pancake holster. I had three spare 10-round magazines stoked with TTI 230 grain hollowpoints on my left hip. Under my armpit was a pouch containing my Advanced Armament Evolution SOF suppressor. I concealed it all under the same type coyote brown contractor vest that I had seen most of the residents of the compound wearing. I had my Benchmade Griptillian in my pocket, and an ASP collapsible baton in my vest. The concealable Pointblank IIIA vest I had on was killing me in the heat, but it would stop most pistol rounds. I live on a diet of paranoia, malice, and Thai food.

“You ready?” Carl asked from behind the wheel.

“Yep,” I cracked the vertebrae of my neck. This was it. “Radio check.”

“I’ve got you, chief,” Reaper’s voice echoed in my ear. “Little Bird can see the van just perfect. Nice and bright on thermal, and clean on NV.” Our tiny surveillance plane worked just as well at night, once you turned off the Christmas lights.

“I can hear you fine. I’ve got a clear view of the gate, and the guards don’t seem to be checking anything,” Jill said. “I think it’s too hot for them to care.”

“You gonna stick with the plan this time, Lorezno?” Carl asked.

“Walk into den of professional killers, find code book, start in shooter’s room and work out from there, try not to get killed, walk back out. Right?” I was nervous, but I tried not to let it show. The shakes would come later, now I needed to be cold and professional.

“Walk in the park. Large number of guys left the compound this morning, probably for a big hit, so it’s quiet. This is as good as it gets.”

“The truck is coming up the street. Go. Go. Go,” Reaper said. Carl started the engine and pulled out of the alley. I pulled a tan Molon Labe hat low onto my head and then placed my hand on the door handle. The metal was scorching hot to the touch.

“Have visual. Truck’s coming towards the roundabout. Distraction time,” Jill reported matter of factly.

“Good luck, everybody,” I said. The van pulled behind the Mitsubishi truck. We had observed this same truck driving into the compound almost every night for the last week. It was pickup style, with a tarp that covered the contents. Thermal told us that nobody rode in the back. One driver, one rider in the cab.

I opened the passenger side door. We had disabled the interior lights. The truck was slowing on the roundabout. We had one shot. Jill was dressed as a servant girl, weighed down with bags of groceries. She walked right into the path of the truck, playing oblivious to the hilt. The driver of the Mitsubishi hit the brakes. Red lights illuminated my world. I was out of the van in a heartbeat, Carl pulling it closed behind me. I could see the passenger’s profile in his mirror, his attention was on Jill.

The tarp was dusty with talcum powder sand. Trying not to make a sudden impact against the shocks, I slid under, and onto the burning heat of the truck’s diamond plate bed. The horn sounded, making me flinch involuntarily. I heard Jill shout back at the driver, and could imagine her shaking her fist.

“I’m in,” I whispered.

Jill heard, and continued on her way down the sidewalk. Carl pulled through the roundabout and headed in a different direction. I lay on the metal that was hot enough to fry bacon and tried not to cry.

“You’re coming through the gate,” Reaper informed me. “Interior guard is waving them past. You’re inside.”

The brakes whined as we rolled to a stop. The smell of diesel was strong in the air. The engine died with a gurgle, and the doors slammed. I heard voices speaking in English, and then it was quiet.

“They’re walking away from the truck. You’re parked under the overhang at Building One.”

Dead Six. I’m coming for you.

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To be continued...
 
This is Correia talking, not narrating. :p This might be the last update for a little bit, as NC and I need to have a little coordination as our POV character's meet.

sm, Dion, Lorenzo's favorite song is War Pigs, by Black Sabbath. Not that that has anything to do with anything, but for some reason, I have that in my head. :D

Just so you guys know, we're cranking these things out, with out a whole lot of thought, preplanning, or proofreading. This is an interesting method of writing something, very free flowing, and once it is public, no real way to go back and edit your continuity screw ups. It is also a whole lot of fun.

Where are we going? You will see.

Now if you like my stuff, please buy my novel, Monster Hunter International, when it becomes available towards the end of this year. It has been proof read, :) and it has zombies in it. What more could you want?
 
GAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!! :what:

You can't quit now! :eek:

It's as bad as cutting to a 15-minute-long commercial break right before a big battle scene! :( :banghead:
 
Correia said:
He’s from some place with a lot of Scandinavians and Lutherans.”
“……You say he’s from Minnesota or whatever, I believe you.”

Did I really just read A Prairie Home Companion reference in a black ops spy/fi novel?

I really love THR
 
You can't quit now!:eek:
Oh, yes, they can. And for good reason. Coordination is ...
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Black Sabbath, eh?

Yeah, I remember them. Ozzie was part of that troupe.

"Black Sabbath met with swift and enduring success. Built around Tony Iommi's driving guitar riffs and Geezer Butler's horror-laden lyrics, topped by Ozzy's eerie, loud vocals, their early records such as their self-titled debut, Paranoid and Master of Reality in particular are considered definitive of heavy metal.[1] This was despite rather modest investment from their US record label Warner Bros.

Several of their early singles, especially "Paranoid" and "Iron Man", continue to draw significant radio airplay to this day. Osbourne himself continues to play these hits when performing as a solo artist."

<memories of driving a VW down a street in a southern city (circa 1971) with black sabbath pumping on the 8-track, when suddenly we noticed that there were hundreds of angry folks of a different race than us lining the streets, racial rioters protesting the death of a child via a police shooting, as i recall...unexpectedly, we were driving behind a dozen cop cars, and there were that many behind us, tracking in car tire tracks cut out of several inches of broken glass strewn on the street like so much confetti after a july 4th parade...>

But that was then, this is now.
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Adar's men. Dead six. Tarantino movie. Reaper had procured satellite pictures.

What will happen next?
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Now, I'm just enjoying Mojitos, listening to Depeche Mode on a couple of 450W studio monitors, backed up by four 18" subs driven by 3000W (just a sound check; nothing special...)

i'm content to be chillin' while NC & C work out the details of the next installment,content to reflect, glad to have the time to catch up on reading, (cause i'm super busy with other stuff right now, anyway).

hey, i think that Depeche Mode could do a credible job with the sound track to this thriller...

Of course, there are a thousand other bands that could do a sound track, even if Cobain is dead.
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DEPECHE MODE - "Precious"

Precious and fragile things
Need special handling
My God what have we done to you
We always tried to share
The tenderest of care
Now look what we have put you through

Things get damaged
Things get broken
I thought we'd manage
But words left unspoken
Left us so brittle
There was so little left to give

Angels with silver wings
Shouldn't know suffering
I wish I could take the pain for you
If God has a master plan
That only He understands
I hope it's your eyes He's seeing through

Things get damaged
Things get broken
I thought we'd manage
But words left unspoken
Left us so brittle
There was so little left to give

I pray you learn to trust
Have faith in both of us
And keep room in your hearts for two

Things get damaged
Things get broken
I thought we'd manage
But words left unspoken
Left us so brittle
There was so little left to give
 
[voice=William Conrad]
Will Nightcrawler get his heart broken or his butt kicked?


Is time running our for Dead 6?
Or will it simply become Dead 5½?



Will women be the downfall of our heros?
Or are the women the ones plotting the fallout?

And will there be a bathing suit competition?




Can anyone be trusted?

Can the tension get more intense?
Can the jokes get any worse?
Will Bullwinkle ever get a new statue at Wassamatta U?
Will Rocky's voice ever change?
Will TVLand ever show reruns of Cannon?
How could my Lincoln Contenental Mark IV squeal tires on a dirt road?





Don't miss the next none too soon episode...





A Jack & A Jill Went Up A Hill,

To Fetch A Pail Of Nightcrawlers





or




Silent Night,

Holy ****!!!


[/voice]
 
We now return you to
the originally scheduled program,
already in progress...

"So, like, which is
the best caliber
for home defense:
9mm or 45 ACP?"

<hovering robotic droid>
Move along.
Move along.
Nothing to see here.
Move along.
</hovering robotic droid>
 
I'll try to get the next chapter up tomorrow morning. I'll see if I can't type it up and email it to myself from work; gonna be slow tonight anyway.

Can't log onto THR from work computer, though.

Intersting choices for the sound track. Must admit, I can't stand that Depesh Mode song that was picked for NC's theme song, though. :eek:

It does fit, I guess. It's fascinating to me to hear what kind of music you guys think fits the various scenes. Good stuff!

Going to get interesting in the next couple of chapters, guys. First story was just me playing around. Now I'm showing what I can do. All in rough draft, on-the-fly, meatball novelist style of writing!
 
Intersting choices for the sound track. Must admit, I can't stand that Depesh Mode song that was picked for NC's theme song, though. :eek:
Hey, NightCrawler, sorry...I didn't mean to imply that particular song should be NC's theme song. It was just the one that I was listening to at that moment, so I put it up there as an example.

The tone and feeling of DM's music really did fit the story nicely, though, IMO, at least at the time last night. I'll have to give it another try.

But of course, it's your (plural) story, so you should get to choose the sound track artists (along with your movie producer ;) ).

Nem
 
Surface Tension

It was very late, probably almost three in the morning, by the time we got back to the compound. Our helicopter had landed out in the desert, and we'd been transferred to a truck. I slept through most of the ride home. Nonetheless, when we arrived, I wanted nothing more than to take a shower and crawl into bed.

But first, we had to be debriefed. Since Tailor and I were the planners of the mission, a sort of shared command, we had to go to the office to talk to the old man and Gordon. Once again, we seemed to have walked in on an argument. Big Boss could be heard literally yelling at Gordon; something about how he'd lied about our latest mission and how it hadn't come through channels.

"What's going on?" I asked, barging in. I still had 36's blood on my fatigues and I was in no mood for office politics.

"Wait outside," Gordon said dismissively, and turned back to Big Boss. Tailor and I simply sat down, not leaving the room.

"I told you to wait outside," Gordon said, getting irritated.

"**** off," Tailor told him.

"Yeah," I said. "Either debrief me now or let me go to bed. I've had enough of this ****. I'm tired." Big Boss remained silent.

"Fine, fine," Gordon said, sounding exasperated. "Report." We told him what had happened, and laid the recovered laptop down on the table. Gordon looked at it like it was some kind of lost treasure.

"And Montalban?" He asked.

"Ventilated," Tailor replied.

"What?" Gordon said. "Need I remind you that your mission was to recover him alive? Did you two ****ing cowboys even make the attempt?"

"Mother****er do you see that ****ing bullet hole in his vest??" Tailor yelled, pointing at the spot where Montalban's bullet had hit me. "We did what we had to do."

"You impudent ****," Gordon sneered. "I've had it with the both of you. I've tolerated your ****-ups for long enough. I won't tolerate insuboridination! One word from me and both of you ****ers disappear!" Tailor and I stood up.

"You've had it?" I asked, much too calmly. "YOU'VE had it? How long have we been here now, Gordon? HOW LONG?"

"Now you listen to me..." he began, trying to reassert himself. With my FAL carbine still slung across my chest, I gave him a firm two handed shove and knocked him to the ground.

"HOW MANY MISSIONS, GORDON? How many times do we have to do this before you let us go? Before we're done? I want OUT, Gordon! HOW MANY PEOPLE DO I HAVE TO KILL BEFORE YOU LET ME GO?" Gordon looked up at me, eyes wide, and said nothing. I suddenly felt very calm.

"Maybe just one more," I said, smoothly drawing the five-inch-barreled .44 Magnum revolver from the drop holster on my left thigh. I leveled it at Gordon, the tritium sights lined up on the bridge of his nose. His mouth fell open, and he froze. Tailor, good partner that he is, drew his USP-45 and held it at the low ready.

"You don't want to do that, son," I heard Big Boss say. I didn't look at him, but from the corner of my eye I could see that he had produced a 2.5" Model 66 revolver, held in his right hand. It was pointed at the left side of my head. Tailor, reacting to this, sidestepped to the left and acquired Big Boss in his sights, holding his pistol in a two-handed combat grip. It was tense.

"Quite the standoff, wouldn't you say, boys?" Big Boss said, his raspy voice revealing not a hint of fear.

"I can't do it anymore, Boss," I said, not moving. Gordon remained silent.

"You don't have to, son," the old man said. "It's over. They've pulled the plug. We're all going home."

"Just like that?"

"Just like that. This last mission is what did it. It wasn't sanctioned. Gordon here took it upon himself to assault that boat. Montalban was a bad guy pulling some strings on some bad ****. But he wasn't a sanctioned target."

"Why?" I asked.

"Gordon wanted that laptop," Boss said. "It's got Montalban's account numbers on it. Plus, capturing him alive would've made Gordon's department look very good. It was personal for him."

"You rat-**** son of a bitch," I said to Gordon. I couldn't say anything else.

"I say we just ****in' kill him," Tailor said, pistol still leveled at Big Boss.

"It won't help, son," Boss said. "Let's all calm down here. Gordon's leaving, right now, and we'll all be leaving shortly. My report to higher will cover all of this. Gordon's going to have a lot to answer for. Now put that gun down. There's been enough killing tonight."

I took a deep breath and holstered my sidearm. Tailor waited until Big Boss did the same, then holstered his own pistol. Gordon got up and pushed past us, heading out the door.

"We'll see who's gonna burn," he sneered. "You're all disavowed." With that, he was gone. He took the laptop with him as he left.

"That's not good," Boss said. "You boys go get some rest. I've got a lot of work to do. That son of a bitch is going to leave us out to dry. We're going to have to use alternate means to get you all home. But you're all going home, I promise you. I'll take care of this. Don't you worry, Gordon will get his."

"If I ever see him again, I'll kill him," I said, walking out the door. I went back to my villa, dumped my gear on my bed, and took a shower. Putting on fresh clothes, I went next door to Sarah's place. I didn't want to be alone just then.

It'd finally come to this, I thought. They'd been pushing us to the breaking point. We'd been getting sloppy, undisciplined. Mounting casualties, missions becoming riskier and more difficult, endless promises that we'd all be going home soon....it was all just too much. Our guys were starting to crack. Starting to talk. Some guys had even had their Dead 6 tatoos done in town!

But it would all be over soon. Thank God...

"Holy ****," Jeff said. "Were you really gonna kill him?"

"He was lucky to have made it out of there alive. I swear to God," I said, closing my eyes, "I wish I'd pulled the trigger."

"What do you mean? What happened?" I just looked at him, feeling a tightness in my chest.


TO BE CONTINUED...
 
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[voice=William Conrad]
Will our Heros get disavowed?
Will they finally make it home in peace or pieces?


And what will happen to Gordon?
Will Nightcrawler cross his path or will he be in the crosshairs of the other "team"?


And what about that deadly cargo that just arrived special delivery?





Find out in our next gripping episode...




He Came In Through The Bathroom Window



or



I'll Get By With A Little Help From My Fiends


[/voice]
 
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I hung from the underside of the stairs of the apartments we had christened Building Three, sweat rolling down my face and stinging my eyes. My grip was tight on the hot metal bars, and I prayed that the Dead Six personnel standing ten feet away would hurry up and find a better place to be.

“Aqua Teens is way better than Venture Brothers,” the first argued. There were some clicking sounds, and then a lighter flame appeared, briefly highlighting the two men. I could hear him take a long drag. The hall light was burned out, and it was dark enough that I could only see the glowing red embers.

Using the thermal camera on Little Bird, Reaper had warned me right before the Dead Six men had turned the corner. My awkward perch was the best that I could come up with on such short notice.

“Dude, you’re stupid,” the second replied. “Venture Brothers has Brock Sampson. Brock Sampson, man. All you got is a milk shake. Quit hogging that.”

Who argues about cartoons in the middle of the night? Ignoring the growing pain in my arms, I contemplated shooting them and getting it over with, but it was too damn hot to have to drag their bodies to a hiding place. Luckily after a few minutes the two super geniuses decided they needed some munchies and went back into their respective apartments.

I slowly lowered myself to the floor, careful to settle my weight with out making a sound. The coast was clear, and within moments I found myself in front of the mystery shooter’s door. We couldn’t know for sure that this was where Adar’s codebook was, but it was the most logical place to start looking. The door was locked, but I picked it under five seconds. I drew my .45, screwed the suppressor on, and entered the room. Thankfully the hinges did not squeak.

The exterior lights of the compound provided enough illumination to see by. The bed was unoccupied. Clear. I checked the bathroom. The shower was damp, and there was still condensation on the mirror. He had not been gone long. I had to hurry. I locked the door. If anyone returned, it would at least give me a brief warning.

Some weapons were thrown on the bed. There was a DSA FAL carbine sitting on top of some armor. My opponent had excellent taste in rifles. The armor itself was blood stained, and had a bullet impact on the trauma plate. Kid must have had a tough day. I could not help but notice the oddball sidearm still holstered on the green web gear, a S&W 629 .44 magnum. Fricking cowboys.

I began to ransack the room, pulling out drawers and checking the contents, trying to not disturb the scene. If the book wasn’t here, I was going to hit the main office next, and the last thing I wanted to do was raise an alarm in this ant’s nest. There was a plastic Godzilla on the dresser. Nice touch.

Clock was ticking. The shooter was bound to be back any minute. There was nothing of interest in the drawers. Closet next. On the floor was a duffle bag, inside was a giant pile of money, and even better, there was the codebook! Leaving the money, I stuffed the book into my vest.

Time to go. “I’ve got the book,” I whispered. “Prepare to extract. Reaper, how’s it look out there?”

“Compound’s clear, can’t see under the overhangs of course.”

“Lorenzo,” Carl’s voice sounded urgent. “Me and Jill are parked half a kilometer from the gate, there’s some weird activity going on down here...”

“What you got?” Something moved in the corner of my vision. “Wait—“

Lights flashed inside my skull and the world exploded in pain.

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[voice=William Conrad]
Well this is an unexpected twist.
Everyone knows that neither the Aqua Teen Hungar Force nor Venture Brothers can hold a candle to Dudley Do-Right of the Mounties or even Mr Peabody and his boy Sherman.



But what has happened in our Hero's abode?

Was it a setup or just a lucky upset?




Find out in our next unforgettable episode;



The Beat Goes On!


or


By The Light Of The Silvery Boom!


[/voice]
 
Appendix: Intersections

My hand hurt. I hadn't laid a dude out like that since high school. Normally, I'm not the punch first and ask questions later kind of guy, but I'd had a horrible night. Coming home and finding this ******* in my apartment just wasn't giving me the warm fuzzies.

He didn't look like much. Not too tall, about five-ten maybe. Medium build, dark hair, dark eyes. Could've passed for a Mexican or an Arab just as easily, I suspect. One of those guys that just doesn't have a memorable face.

And yet...I did remember it. Johnny Rockets. This guy had been in Johnny Rockets when I'd been there with Sarah.

Well.

I didn't guess him for a Qatari, though. He was dressed in one of those dorky 5.11 vests, and nothing screams "I'm an American!!" like a khaki vest. He had a hat that said "ΜΟΛΩΝ ΛΑΒΈ" on it. How odd...

I'd punched him in the back of the head, and he fell on his face. Presently, I was kneeling down, my left knee going down his spine, holding him down. I could tell he was stronger than he looked, but I probably outweighed him by fifty pounds. Isaac Newton was on my side.

"So tell me," I said, holding his head down into the carpet with one hand while patting him down with the other. "What exactly did you think was going to happen here? I don't think you know what you've wandered into, dude." I found a gun on his belt, and with my right hand drew it out of the holster.

Some kind of funny-looking M1911 clone, Commander-length barrel, with a suppressor. One of those double stack ones, an STI, no less. So I was getting robbed by an STI-toting 1911 snob. Nice.

I swiped the pistol off of safe, and pressed the end of the can against the back of my guest's skull. I dug my knee in between his shoulder blades.

Those who lay eyes on an operative shall not live to tell of it. The first rule of Dead 6. I'd violated it several times, but...hell, this guy was in my room! Hard to let that slide.

"I've had a lousy night, man. I've already killed a few people. I nearly killed my boss. So don't **** with me, and you might get out of this alive. Let's talk..."


TO BE CONTINUED...
 
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Did I make a typo. Brian?

That's part of the fun of meatball novelism. You just crank out your rough draft and slap it up there. I typed that up at work. :D

Going to bed now. Lousy night. Can never seem to escape the office intrigue, I swear. Correia will update soon.
 
My head was swimming, my ears were ringing, and I had a mouth full of carpet fibers. I had been hit hard, real hard. My ear piece had fallen out and was laying on the floor next to my head. Carl was screaming about something.

"I've had a lousy night, man. I've already killed a few people. I nearly killed my boss. So don't **** with me, and you might get out of this alive. Let's talk..."

Where had he come from? The door hadn’t opened. The balcony, he had come in from the balcony. I’m such an idiot. A knee was on my back, and he was heavy. I felt the metallic pressure of a gun against the base of my throbbing skull. No time to think, had to act.

“Oh, man, please don’t hurt me. Don’t shoot, please don’t shoot.” I put as much snivel and whimper into it as I could. I could barely hear Carl’s tinny voice over the dislocated ear bud, but he could still hear my throat mike just fine. Carl knew what to do, and I distinctively heard the words plan B. “I heard you had a bunch of cash in your room, I just wanted the cash, please don’t shoot, I’ve got a wife and five kids, and and…”

“Bull. Who are you—“ he instinctively jerked his head towards the balcony as the explosion rocked the room. I had left a little surprise on the truck I had snuck in on for Carl to detonate in case I needed a distraction. The room was briefly illuminated as an oily fire cloud rose in the compound. I rolled hard to the right, jerking my head to the side, as the shooter fired a round into the carpet. His knee slipped off my back, putting him off balance. I grabbed my gun in his hand, and used the leverage of the suppressor to twist it against his trigger finger. He bellowed in anger, and I slammed my palm into his chin and shoved him off. The STI spun away under the bed.

He hit the ground hard, and immediately began to rise. I put my palms flat on the floor above my head, arched my back, and kicked, using the momentum to launch myself up and land on my feet.

“Whoa,” he said right before I kicked him in the chest. Desert dust flew from my boot as he crashed back into the wall next to the bed. The flickering flames cast weird shadows in the room. I moved in while he was off balance, and threw a knee to his side. He grimaced but stayed up. I followed with an elbow to his face, but he blocked it with his forearm, and then used his size advantage to shove me back with one big meat hook against my sternum.

The kid was bigger, and stronger, but I was faster. I locked up on his arm, spun inside of it, and slugged him in the kidney, then put my foot on the inside of his knee and forced him down. I jerked up on his arm, trying to snap it at the elbow. He crashed into the dresser, snapping boards, and sending things flying.

“ARRGGHH **** you ****!” he shouted as his other arm came around, something shiny reflecting in the flickering light, and caught me on the side of the head with it. There was a metallic clang, my brain bounced around inside my skull, and I was down hard, blood spewing out of my mouth. I floundered across the bed, sending gear everywhere. The room spun as I refocused, again on the floor, and at the blood stained Korth revolver that he had hit me with. I rolled out of the way as his foot kicked through empty air. I was back up in a split second, trying to make distance until I could see straight.

My Benchmade clicked open in my hand, like I had willed it there with anger alone. He passed by the bed, obviously scanning for a weapon, something coming up in his hand, a combat knife, time slowing down, as we focused on each other.

“Oh, it’s on now,” he said as he pointed the knife at me, chest heaving, gasping for breath.

I spit out a broken tooth and a whole bunch of blood as I spun my blade into a reverse grip, “On like Donkey Kong, ******-******.”

We charged.

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To be continued…
 
Wow, good stuff, guys.

Correia, you will have to tell us more about your book.

BluesBear, you are absolutely killing me.
 
Red State, Monster Hunter International is a novel, based on the idea that if all the monsters of B movies were real, what kind of nutjobs would kill them for fun and profit? :)
 
This started as a cool adventure of one guy, and has spawned into two story lines I DAMN WELL BETTER SEE A CONCLUSION TO!

Ya hear me? Being left hanging makes me mad. You wouldn't like me when I'm mad. :evil:

what kind of nutjobs would kill them for fun and profit?

So, you've been stalking me?
 
Been reading since yesterday - GREAT STORY(ies) both of you.

Not a music expert but "mama don't let your babies grow up to be cowboys" sounds like it could fit in some of these scenes.


No CW fans on here?

A book would be a good idea - a screenplay might even be better!

Again GREAT!
 
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