Only had time to read the 1st chapter while working, content's great and I'm by no means a pro-writer but here's my little bit constructive criticism:
When characterizing DJ, maybe show instead of tell? I know this is a shorter story, so you have less time to develop the characters I guess, but you start out telling me he's likeable but he emotes only two (present-day) things in the first chapter- a scowl at the situation and smugly turning off his ATV... his attitude is a little off-putting (understandable given the situation, nevertheless, not "charismatic" per se). So DJ's not quite pinned down. Gabe, meanwhile, immediately feels characterized by what he's doing and feeling the moment he appears in the story.
Maybe it's because of the skipping time frames early in the story? Your introduction is pre-crisis with a side story about his heroics, then you go to present day, then to post-crisis but before present day, then back to present day, etc. I really really like what you did with the "doing the dishes" and think if you expand on that you could keep everything in one main timeline & character perspective (right now, as is, it starts with sort of an omniscient narrator explaining DJ, but then we're put mostly in DJ's perspective) with different objects, sights, and thoughts triggering the different explanations... he could see a plaque commendation, paper clipping, or ex's old clothing summoning the memory of the rescue; his uniform hanging in the corner, triggering the uniform explanation (I don't think he's wearing it while eating, right?), a bra revealing his womanizing ways, etc. etc.
Again, I'm not expert, feel free to ignore anything not helpful, just my initial impression from the first chapter. Love where it's going so far and know I can always count on great gear from your stories!
