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Even better, find some other Tom Clancy wannabes on this board to write it for you. Although, coordination might be alittle bit of a problem, it wouldn't make much sense if Lorenzo dies in Nighcrawlers story, but in another viewpoint he dies.
 
Why are so many people trying so hard to fix something that ain't broke?

Nightcrawler & Corriea are writing one hell of a story together.
Don't forget it's THEIR story and no one elses so let them do it their way.
(And they control the copyrights to all of it. Plot, characters the whole shebang.)

However if anyone thinks they can write a better story, feel free to start your own thread.
 
Either of you guys ever read Vince Flynn? The switching-point-of-view style reminds me of his writing style. In fact, this thread inspired me to read some spy fiction, and since the thread started, I've read Term Limits, Transfer of Power, Third Option, Separation of Power and Executive Power Can't put it down- can't get enough... kinda like this story!

(edited for gnilleps)
 
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i knew this would happen...

People... I love the story. I posted another note saying as much a few days ago. They were just thoughts. I don't always like someone blowing smoke up my rear when I do things, I like having other opinions... it keeps me from getting stuck in a box and shows me they are interested. I apologize to the authors (including Bluesbear, as your commentary is hilarious) if a wrong chord was struck.
 
Totally cool. :) I'm not one of those sensitive artist types. On anything I write I'm open to criticism. Just keep in mind that NC and I are banging this out as we go, and there wasn't any real planning involved.

NC's update is next.
 
'Crawler & Correia

Sounds like a CPA , Law Firm, or Septic tank cleanng team or something don't it?

Are sharing a great work with us and even tho' they are having fun - a lot of thought and hard work going on behind the scenes.

They are too modest...

Ya'll behave.

Lest you sic-ed on :

'Crawler needs his laundry done, and ya'll for sure don't want to do that...


Correia's got kids that can ring steels with handguns - worst punishment would be babysitting them ...oh the kids are great, just keeping them in cheese dip is gonna break ya.
And that is after they shoot up all your .22 lr ammo.

:D
 
Appendix: Interpersonal Dynamics

Once again, it seemed, I found myself in the middle of somebody else's fight. This is more or less the story of my life.

Well, perhaps not so much this time. I had every reason to believe that Gordon or Gordon's group were behind the abduction of Miss DelToro. Besides that, if I hadn't shot those two thugs, the police wouldn't have gotten involved, and Jill probably wouldn't have been found by the government.

So it was kind of my fault, and that's why I didn't mind helping Lorenzo get her back. It wasn't really through any desire to repay him for saving my life. There had been a lot of times when I'd wished that I'd died with Sarah.

A few hours later, Lorenzo's "associates" arrived. His associates consisted of exactly one skinny Goth kid dressed all in black, carrying a laptop computer. He had a big hockey bag slung over his shoulder.

The kid was a trip. Black fatigue pants, combat boots, black Rob Zombie t-shirt. Black trench coat, and his hair was highlighted. He had piercings in his nose, ears, and eyebrows, and had a number of tattoos on top of it.

He looked suprised when he noticed me sitting against the far wall. I had my Colt disassembled on the table in front of me and was cleaning it.

"Who the **** are you?" he asked.

"Who the **** are you?" I retorted.

"Wait...it's you! You're that guy!"

Raising my eyebrows, I looked over at Lorenzo. "I get this a lot," I said.

"What are you doing here?" the kid asked me.

"I'm going to help you get your little girlfriend back so I can get on with my life," I said, going back to my cleaning.

"Yeah," Lorenzo said, "Reaper, this is..."

"I know who he is," the kid interrupted. "Is he for real?"

"Yeah, he's for real," Lorenzo replied. "Let's get started. How are we gonna do this?"

"I'm still on board with the 'go in and kill everybody' plan," I said.

"Yeah, but we need to find Jill first...****. We need more information. I called somebody earlier who might know. He's working on it now."

"We need to get going," I said. "Look, we don't have a lot of time left. We don't know what we don't know, alright? We'll just have to go in and play it by ear."

"Not really my style," Lorenzo said.

"Mine either," I confessed. "But nobody ever tells me what the **** is going on, so I just roll with it. You guys got weapons?"

"**** yeah we got weapons," the kid, 'Reaper', said. He picked up the hockey bag and dumped it out onto my bed. Lorenzo rolled his eyes slightly as weapons, magazines, radios, body armor, and night vision equipment came clattering out of the bag, landing in a heap on the mattress.

So this was the crack team that had managed to track down Dead 6 and infiltrate our compound, I thought ruefully.

Reaper handed a carbine to Lorenzo, who proceeded to check it. Some kind of short, select-fire AR-15, with a ten inch barrel and a suppressor. It had an EoTech holographic sight mounted on top, and had quad rail handguard. A Surefire vertical foregrip weapon light was mounted on the bottom rail, and an IR/visible laser pointer was mounted on the top. The carbine had folding backup sights and some kind of swoopy collapsing stock, too.

Reaper pulled from the bag a Glock 17. He inserted a magazine, chambered a round, then stuck the pistol in a shoulder holster under his trench coat. On his belt he had six more extended nineteen round magazines. He then picked up what I assumed was his primary weapon.

I didn't recognize it at first. Lorenzo grinned when he saw me puzzling over it. It was short, stubby, and had a big magazine.

"It's a customized Saiga twelve guage shotgun. You know Saigas?"

"Yeah, Russian autoloaders, magzine fed."

"Yeah. This one's got a folding stock and an eight inch barrel. It's mounted with a Russian Kobra sight. Some guys we know up in Utah sell them."

"Cool," I said. I had to admit, I kind of liked it. I wondered how well Reaper could use it, though. He looked like an extra from The Matrix.

I watched the two of them get suited up. I could tell they'd been working together since...well, probably since that kid graduated from high school, which couldn't have been all that long ago.

Still, for old friends, they didn't talk much. It might've been because of my presence, but then, professional thieves probably have some weird interpersonal dynamics going on.

Like I've got any room to talk, right?

Anyway, Reaper handed me a radio headset, so the three of us would be able to communicate. Meanwhile, Lorenzo examined a pair of night vision goggles that he'd pulled from the gear pile on the bed. Myself, I'd already had my Colt put back together. I put on my body armor, and a chest harness over that that held three magazines for my rifle. I had a pistol belt with a drop holster on my left thigh, and a triple pistol magazine pouch on my right hip. The kid snickered when I took off my glasses and replaced them with my prescription Wiley-X goggles. Well, **** him anyway. Losing your glasses in the middle of a gunfight is bad.

That done, Lorenzo made a phone call. Someone named Bob, apparently a friend of his. He asked him if he had found the information; apparently this guy had the scoop. Hanging up the phone, he looked at me.

"What's the word?" I asked, fiddling with my thigh holster like a woman adjusting a stocking.

"Our next stop is a closed rest stop a few miles past the California line. From there we go on a dirt road and follow it south for about ten miles. Out there is an abandoned prison work camp. That's where they're holding her."

"You're sure of this? Can your friend be trusted?"

"I'm sure. He's... like a brother to me."

A couple hours later, as the sun was setting, we were headed back west down Interstate 15. I was driving the Taurus, following Lorenzo in his Explorer and Reaper in the Honda Civic rental car he was driving.

It wasn't a long drive. Within an hour, we were getting off the Interstate. The rest stop was closed, but you could still pull off into the parking lot. Sitting in the parking lot was a nondescript black Suburban. I watched Lorenzo and Reaper get out of their cars, and could tell they were suprised.

Anxious, I got out myself, my hand hovering over my pistol. All three of us had on body armor and other battle rattle. I hoped like hell it wasn't a cop.

From out of the Suburban stepped a big guy, tall, barrel chested, and muscular. He and Lorenzo were exchanging words as I approached. I could tell they knew each other. I wondered if it was the guy Lorenzo had been talking to on the phone? Why would he be here?

That's when I noticed the government plate on the Suburban.

"Well **** me," I said to myself. My stomach lurched at the realization. I'd been set up. I'd been ****ing set up! Lorenzo, the kid, the girl...it was all some ridiculously overcomplicated scheme to turn me over to the Feds! Worse, it had worked! There was undoubtedly an FBI SWAT team hiding in the rest stop, waiting for the signal.

My mind racing, I tried to figure a way out. It was then that Lorenzo noticed me looking at him, at the Suburban, and at his friend. He probably also noticed my hand reaching for my .45.

"No! It's cool! It's cool!" He said excitedly. "This is my brother, Bob. He's..."

"You set me up, you son of a bitch," I said quietly, hand moving away from my gun. There was no point. I'd walked right into it, and they had me.

"It's not like that," Lorenzo insisted. "He's my brother. He wasn't supposed to be here. He's supposed to be getting his family to safety!" Lorenzo glared at the other man.

"So," I said, "you called a Fed. Your brother the Fed. You ****ing *******! Why don't you call the ATF and the Secret ****ing Service while you're at it! Hell, we can get the DEA and the Coast Guard in on it too, and have a giant ****ing Federal law enforcement jamboree! God damn it!" I was fuming mad.

"Look Kid," the big man said, "I don't know who you are and I don't care. I'm here to help my brother get his girlfriend back."

"She's not my girlfriend!" Lorenzo sputtered. The big man grinned. I relaxed slightly. They were certainly acting like brothers. They didn't look anything alike, though.

"This is my brother Bob," Lorenzo said. "Bob, this is..."

"Don't you DARE tell him my ****ing name!" I yelled, wheeling around.

Lorenzo laughed. "I'm just ****ing with you kid, relax." I muttered something to myself. It was going to be a long night...
 
sm wrote,
Y'all behave.
You got it; they're doing a masterful job.

I seldom disagree with you, Steve, and I'm not really, now, but you also wrote,
And that [eating up all of your cheese dip--H.Bob] is after they shoot up all your .22 lr ammo.
Hmmm...the kids shooting up all of your .22 ammo is a problem how, exactly? :confused:


j/k. :D


Great work, Gentlemen. Thanks and admiration from this neck of the woods.
 
[voice=William Conrad]


And now there are four.




Can this force of four channel the ghost of Thin Elvis and make the Gordonaires sing the blues?

Or will they just play it by ear and get Jill out of a jam?



Will Lorenzo's brother Bob sing to the feds?

Or will he orchestrate the rescue and the revenge?





You won't want to miss our next harmonious episode;



Living & Dying In Three Quarter Time!


or


California Scheming!


[/voice]
 
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I found a link to this story on another site a couple of weeks ago and have been hooked ever since. This is an amazing story on an awesome site.
 
Soundtrack

No, I ain't forgot.

Had to to this all by myself.

<walks to double doors - opens doors>

Klipsh Speakers, got 6 of 'em over there <points>.
Now over there <pointing some more> are the Cerwin Vegas - 4 of them.

Is Eleven greater than Ten ?
Well Eleven is one more than Ten, so it must be Greater.
-Anon

[actually I forgot whom said that]

<Checks to make sure all Volume controls are on 11 - Finger hovers over the Power Button - Grins real friggin' big.>

"push"

In The Air Tonight - Phil Collins

(ain't them drums cool? :D

Against All Odds - Phil Collins

From the Soundtrack of the 1984 movie of the same name
http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0086859/

Got Rachel Ward in it too < heart pitter- patters>:)

Now, got a hankering to use that turntable over there
Called a "record" for you young whippesnappers.

<removes 45 record with SS 396 by Paul Revere and The Raiders, puts into sleeve...removes 45 adapter..
Removes a 33 1/3 LP, moves setting to "33 1/3" , checks album cover 1, 2, 3... finds spot...here we go>

Hey Big Brother - Rare Earth



Dang, "sniff, sniff" Smells like a Jesus Bus and Annie Green Springs in here for some reason now.

:D

Oh, totally cool! <spies another album>

Janis Joplin - gotta fit this bitc...umm 'lady performer' on the soundtrack too...

:cool:


Edit : because my bi-focals are dirty and ...
oh the fact Jamie C. [post 615] spotted a mistake and he must have more brain cells and his are younger than mine.
 
SM, you sir, have extraordinary taste in music, and the proper equipment for playing it and listening to it. My compliments sir.

Now, I'm gonna need Prozac, or blood pressure medication, the rate this story's going.

N.C. & Correia: Awesome work!!!
 
sm said:
Oh, I can use the excuse I am "old" now too.


"We got Spirit
We are Free
We the Class of '73"
Class of '73? You ain't old, son. I'm from the class of '62. What does that make me? Don't answer that. I don't think I want to know.

Nightcrawler, Correia, BluesBear, you guys are good. Thanks for sharing. Can't wait for the next episode.
 
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BB93YJ,

I appreciate the kind words.

Sorry, I do not have the equipment personally, I am familar with it, have used it,and...

I went simple when I got older. Most time listen to tunes on a Sony Walkman with a Cassette, in the Truck with Cassette, and My countertop Sony with AM/FM/ Cassette/ CD is being used at another location.

Hey, I do not own a TV either, less stuff to dust, vacuum around or whatever.

--

qlajlu,

We ain't old. Matter of attitude and perspectives.
Numbers are for figuring and such.

--

Anon.

Yes I have other tunes in mind that I may not be sharing.
Nightcrawler, Correia, OLeg and a few others know of this and why.
*grin*

--

Umm,

Ya'll like some Country, some of that old Hank Sr all the way to some Progressive Country?

Yeah I thought so.

Them boys get to writing, maybe plug some in the mix too.
 
Ya'll like some Country, some of that old Hank Sr...

Oh please, no, don't do that... :uhoh:

I grew up with a grandfather who was one of those country/bluegrass musicians... and I've been forced to hear enough of it over the years...

Nothing will send me running for the trees faster than Bill Monroe/hank Williams Sr/etc.....

( Anybody out there know who Sam & Kirk McGee are/were? My grandfather was a guitar player for 'em for 7 years on the "Grand Ol' Opry", back in the '70s... )


J.C.
 
"All My Rowdy Friends" -Bosephus

"Red Headed Stranger" - Willie Nelson

"Poncho & Lefty" - Willie

"Live Like You Are Dying" - Tim McGraw

Don't tell me you don't like them and for sure don't say Martina McBride (dang if she don't get me all riled up) Faith Hill, Tim McGraw, Toby Keith, Kenny Chesney. Delbert McClinton (folks think of me when they hear him) , Alan Jackson ( folks say I remind them of him :p )

Oh Chet Atkins can strum them strings now...
Just some of this here Country is what we call Progressive Country.

Kinda Partial to Outlaw Country - when some broke traditon, left Nashville and recorded in Texas!

Outlaw Country seems fitting for the story. ;)

"The Outlaw " Album
Willie, Waylon, Lefty Frizzel....
 
"The Outlaw " Album
Willie, Waylon, Lefty Frizzel....

Huh?


Are you referring to the seminal album titled "Wanted: The Outlaws" ?

That was Waylon Jennings, Willie Nelson, Jessi Colter (Waylon's wife) and Tompall Glaser (Tompall & The Glaser Brothers).


Lefty Frizzell had been dead for a while when that was recorded.
And Lefty is about as much an outlaw artist as Hiriam Williams.
 
Nightcrawler stomped away, muttering and swearing. I turned back to Bob and whispered, “What are you doing here?”

My giant of a brother nodded towards Nightcrawler. “Your friend seems a little tense.”

“Yeah. He’s wound kind of tight. But back to the question, what are you doing here? What about the family?”

“The family will be fine. I’ve put some things into motion. You should have come to me sooner.” Bob shaded his eyes and scanned the horizon. “Look, Hector, this Gordon Willis you asked me about, he’s a scumbag bureaucrat, given too much power, who’s gotten involved in some serious business. If he has your friend, she’s in big trouble.”

“You can’t do this, you’re the law. You’re a ******* cop.”

“I won’t be for long if anybody ever finds out about this,” he answered. “Maybe we can share a cell.”

“But these are your people...”

He raised his voice. “These are not my people. I took an oath to defend the Constitution, and I’m sick of watching people like Gordon shred it. People like him work in a different kind of government than the one I signed on to. Black, secret, unaccountable, we’re not even supposed to ask questions about his operation. He’s had suspects taken in, no evidence, no investigation, no trial, and they just disappear into thin air, forever. These aren’t even bad guys they’re rolling up. They’re regular folks who’ve asked too many questions about the wrong powerful people. I can’t let you go in there with just these guys,” he gestured towards the other two. “Who are they anyway?”

“The squirrelly one goes by Nightcrawler, the kid is named Reaper.”

“Okay, then I’m Colossus and you can be Wolverine. Doesn’t anybody have a normal name in your business?”

“Actually, I go by Lorenzo,” I responded, slightly embarrassed.

Bob just stared at me. “Serious? Wow, that’s devious. And what part came as a surprise when Big Eddie found his way past your masterful secret identity? You were only raised by Lorenzos.”

“You guys done ******* around?” Nightcrawler growled as he approached. "Let's get going."

My brother shook his head sadly. “Gordon’s men aren’t the type you can arrest. They are a bunch of professional killers. Jerk-offs who’ve gotten kicked out of every reputable organization there is because they're too violent, too crazy, or too corrupt. Operations like Gordon’s attract them like flies,” Bob spat. “The old camp is over that rise. We used to use it to hole up Mafioso witnesses out of Vegas. Word is that Gordon’s men are using it now.”

“Let’s get these cars hidden, then sneak up on the camp and see if we can spot Jill,” I suggested, hefting my AR. “If we’re lucky, maybe we can get her out with minimal shooting.”

Bob turned, opened the back of his Suburban, pulled out a large black rifle, with an OpsInc suppressor, Harris bipod, and Leopold scope. He pulled back the charging handle on the DPMS .308 and let it fly forward. “I wouldn’t bet on it.”

Reaper grinned, gesturing with his stubby shotgun. “Good.” The bravado was forced. The kid was tough, but he wasn’t a warrior like the rest of us. But God bless his techno-geek soul, he was ready. “Let’s get some.”

Nightcrawler shrugged. He was still a mystery, and I was worried about him. His attitude seemed to border on suicidal. “Let’s get this over with.”

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To be continued...
 
The four of us climbed the sagebrush and scrub tree hill. The sun was rapidly setting. I suggested we track further to one side so that we could attack out of the sun. Nightcrawler didn’t seem to care one way or the other, Bob thought it was a good idea, and Reaper was used to following my orders.

We checked the radios on the walk in and they worked fine. We had no plan and no intel. Our group had never worked together before, and outside of Reaper and I, the amount of confidence we had in each other’s abilities could be carried in a shot glass.

“So why do you only carry a couple of extra magazines?” Reaper asked Nightcrawler. Reaper was festooned with Saiga mags, long eight-rounders across his chest, and even more on his belt and on leg rigs.

“I'm pretty good with a rifle,” Nightcrawler said quietly, not looking at him. "Eighty rounds will be plenty."

"How good is pretty good?" Reaper asked. Kid just didn't know when to quit.

"I'm not one to throw around movie quotes," Nightcrawler replied, "but I'm a ****ing surgeon with a rifle. You follow me, Neo?"

“I miss a lot,” Reaper explained. “That’s why Lorenzo makes me use the shotgun.”

“Super. You know, we really ought to be quiet,” Nightcrawler said.

“Yeah, quiet down, they might have sentries posted at the top of the hill.”

“They won’t,” Bob said. “They’ve been operating above the law so long, they think they’re untouchable. The idea of us coming to them will never even enter their minds.”

After a half an hour of walking we hunkered down in the rocks three hundred yards from the old prison work camp. It looked almost like a ghost town out of an old west movie. There were several wooden buildings, paint long since peeled, signs long since faded. One larger building was directly below us, built out of cinderblocks, and looked like it had been a truck stop or some sort of garage back in the days before the freeway bypassed this little settlement. Fence posts stuck out of the ground like random teeth in a broken jaw, the barb wire mostly rusted away.

There were several vehicles parked on the broken asphalt of that building, new vehicles, black sedans, a Chevy passenger van, and another G-ride Suburban. There were a couple of men standing around the cars, smoking, talking, long guns visible slung from their backs.

Bob extended the bipod legs on his sniper rifle and hunkered down. He cranked the scope to maximum zoom and began to scan. “I’ve got three in the parking lot. At least one moving inside the garage.” After a moment he froze. “Hector? Take a look at the window on the left.”

“Hector?” Reaper laughed. “Your real name is Hector?”

“Shut it... Skyler,” I answered. Reaper was immediately silent. Nightcrawler snorted as he tried to suppress a laugh.

"Yeah? Well what the **** kind of name is 'Nightcrawler'?" Reaper hissed defensively.

"It's French," Nightcrawler replied, looking through the scope on his rifle and grinning.

Bob moved aside and I got behind the DPMS. It took a moment to find the right window on 10X. The glass was gray with filth and was hard to see through.

Jill.

“Yeah. That’s her.” She was slumped in a chair, her long black hair obscuring her face. I had an idea. I did not want to endanger the lives of these men. They were all here because I had asked them. I moved into a crouch, and examined each of them in the fading light. “Okay. Here is the plan. I’m going to sneak up on that building, break in, and secure Jill. If everything works out, I can get her out of there before they ever even know we were here.”

“That’s just stupid,” Bob said. “You’ve been playing too much Splinter Cell. There’s no way you could sneak in there under their noses.”

Reaper just looked at him and grinned. “Dude, you have no ******* idea. Your brother could steal cookies from the Keebler elves.”

Nightcrawler pointed down the hill. “There’s a ravine. While you’re crawling through the weeds, I'll take Marilyn Manson here and head down that way. It'll put us closer so we can back you up if this all goes to ****. Hey, Officer Friendly. You pretty good with that rifle?”

Bob nodded. “Officer what? What's your problem, kid?” Before I had dropped off the grid, I knew that Bob had spent most of his free time shooting High Power rifle competitions and winning 3gun matches. When we were teenagers, I had spent my free time boosting cars, while he had shot coyotes for the local farmers. Bob was better than me at most things, and shooting was probably towards the top of that list. “I’m on your side.”

"Whatever. Least you're not ATF. Those guys totally hate me."

This was it. I put my hand out, palm down. “Thanks, guys.”

Reaper put his on top of mine. “Anytime, chief.”

Bob followed suit. “No problem, bro.”

Nightcrawler looked at us incredulously. "What the ****? What is this? Oh my God. You're serious, aren't you?" A moment later, grinning, he stuck his hand on the pile. "Power of HEART!" he exclaimed. "Go Captain Planet!"

“That’s the spirit,” I said, as Nightcrawler pulled away, barely containing sarcastic laughter. Okay, maybe it was a little corny.

I took one last look at my friends (and Nightcrawler), nodded, and disappeared into the weeds.

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To be continued...
 
There was probably only a few minutes of daylight creeping over the hills by the time I crept up on the cinderblock wall. My load bearing equipment was coated in dirt, twigs, and dead leaves. I hadn’t been seen.

“Looking good... Lorenzo,” Bob’s voice said in my ear. “Guards are leaning on the cars out front. I don’t see any movement in the back room. There are a few men inside the next room.”

Crouching below the window, I cradled my AR in my strong hand, and reached up and tested the window. It was the multi-paned, hinged type. It moved slightly. It was unlocked.

Just then my phone began to vibrate. I pulled it out of my pocket, glanced both ways, still clear, and flipped it open. “Yeah,” I hissed.

“Mr. Lorenzo.” It was the digitally altered voice. I could hear the real voice through the broken window fifteen feet away. “Where are you?”

“I’m going through Las Vegas now,” I whispered. “Bad reception here.”

“You will proceed to a town called Quagmire near the California border and wait for further instructions.” The normal human voice came through the window a split second before the distorted voice.

“Sorry, you’re breaking up.” I closed the phone and put it back in my pocket.

“****, lost him. He says he’s in Vegas,” the voice said. “Send the team to Quagmire.”

“Should we take the girl, Sir? He said he wanted to see her alive.”

“They all say that. Keep her alive long enough to talk on the phone if we need her. Then put a bullet in her. Remember, we want this Lorenzo alive. Eddie won’t give us anything for him dead.”

Eddie?

Big Eddie? How could Gordon the government guy be involved with Big Eddie? This didn’t make any sense. Nightcrawler must have picked that up from my microphone. “I recognize that voice. Gordon's here. You don't touch him. He's mine."

“Let me get Jill first then you can go on a killing spree,” I whispered.

“A bunch of SWAT team-looking men are getting in the passenger van,” Bob noted calmly. There was the sound of a door sliding shut, and then a large engine revving. They were going to set up an ambush for nobody. I crouched lower as the headlights briefly swung past the cinderblock wall.

“I’m going in.” This was it. I sprung up and took a quick look through the dirty window. Jill was slumped in a chair. There was nobody else in the room. The room was filled with old trash, rusted metal, and broken bits of wood. Thick spider webs clouded the corners. I pushed the heavy panes open slowly, rust binding in the hinge, begging to let out a screech. I gritted my teeth, pushing, praying for silence. Finally it was open wide enough to scramble through.

The door to the backroom opened. I slid back down the outside wall. A man was coming into the room. He was wearing a cheap suit and a cigarette dangled from his lip. He had an MP5 slung over one shoulder. “Hey, baby. The boss man says we don’t need you much longer.”

Jill raised her head for the first time. There was duct-tape over her mouth. Having held her against her will once myself, I could understand the need for the tape. She struggled against the chair. The fierce anger in her eyes was very familiar. The man closed the door behind him. “See, the way I figure it, I’m your only hope right now. You do me a little favor, and maybe I do you a little favor, know what I mean.” If he was any more of a slimebag he would be leaving a trail.

The man leaned the MP5 against the wall. He took his suit coat off, threw it on top of the gun and began to loosen his tie. “You know you want it anyway, baby. Make this good for me, and I can talk the boss into letting you go.” Jill just glared at him.

I found the small dowels in my pocket, palmed them in one hand, then slowly put my hands on the windowsill and began to lever myself through as silently as possible. If I could take this guy out quietly, we still had a chance.

The man had his back to me, distracted, he ran one hand through Jill’s hair. She jerked her head away. “Fine, you wanna be a *****, whatever, I like it when they fight,” he laughed.

What happened next was a surprise. Jill’s hands came around in a blur, bloody tape still tied around her wrists. She must have been working those against the back of the chair for hours. She stuck one thumb into his eye, and locked the other one around his larynx. The man started to scream, but she cranked down on his throat and choked it off. Her knee found his crotch, so violently hard that I cringed.

He punched her in the side, she cranked down harder, crushing his windpipe, forcing him to his knees. I pushed myself through the window, landing on my hands and rolling. The would-be rapist was on his back now, with Jill bearing down on his throat with both hands. He grabbed her by her hair and pulled her down, but she didn’t let go of his neck.

The door opened, I stepped behind it with out thinking, a dowel in each hand now. “Davis, what the **** are you doing in here?” the second man asked, he stepped into the dark, his imagination filling in the blanks about the struggle before him, drawing all the wrong conclusions. “Can’t you just keep it in your—“ I kicked the door closed after he stepped through, the length of piano wire stretched between the two dowels coming down over his head. I crossed my arms and tugged with all of my strength.

He never knew what hit him. The second man struggled, leaning forward, I followed, all my weight dragging the wire inexorably through his flesh. The wire grated against vertebra in a matter of seconds and we both fell to the ground in a spreading puddle of red. The head was only barely attached.

I rolled off the twitching body and moved to assist Jill, but she didn’t need any help. She leaned back, shaking, the man’s eyes staring blankly at the ceiling, his tongue almost bit off between his teeth. Jill stood, angrily ripped the tape from her face, and kicked the body once.

“Jill? Are you okay?” I whispered. The sound of conversation could be heard on the other side of the door. The rest of Gordon’s men hadn’t heard. She fell into my arms and sobbed. “It’s okay. I’ve got you.”

“You came for me.” She was crying. “I thought I was dead... I’ve never killed anyone before.”

“It’s okay, ****** deserved it. Let’s get out of here.”

We weren’t out of the woods yet. The radio crackled. “Lorenzo, did you get her?” It was Nightcrawler.

“Yeah, we’re coming out.”

“Hold on. There’s more vehicles coming in,” Bob said. “I’ve got an SUV and a couple of sedans.” Headlights came through the window. Our escape route was illuminated.

“Lots of men moving now. These new ones seem to be paying attention. Don’t move,” Bob insisted.

“What’s wrong?” Jill asked desperately. She was wearing some sort of pink waitress outfit, but it was filthy and had blood splattered on it. She looked exhausted and tired. “Is that Carl on the radio?”

She didn’t know. It just strengthened my resolve. “We can’t sneak out. We’re going to have to fight.”

“Lorenzo, we’re in position. Just say when,” Nightcrawler said. His demeanor had changed. He wasn't the sarcastic, nervous ******* he had been. Now he sounded like he had ice water in his veins. I can only imagine what kind of childhood he must've had to have gotten so ****ed up.

Jill knelt by the nearly decapitated man and removed a Sig 226 from his belt. She checked the chamber then stuck it into her waistband. “There’s an MP5 under that coat.” She followed my pointing finger and nodded. I leaned against the door and listened. There were more voices on the other side now.

“So what do you want, Gordon?” Oily. British accent. Effeminate. “I’ve got important business to conduct. I don’t have time to drive out to middle of the bloody desert. I had to fly into a pathetic little dirt strip airport in some place called Quagmire to even get here.”

Eddie.

“I did you a favor once, Mr. Montalban. I would think by now you would trust me.” The voices were muffled through the ancient wooden door.

“Removing my brother from the equation did improve my affairs rather immensely. But you kept his laptop, and access to his personal accounts, so I would hardly call it a favor.”

“As was part of the agreement.”

“I always keep my promises, Mr. Willis. So tell me why you dragged me out here to this filthy, dreadful little place.”

After all of this, Edward Montalban was in the next room. He had killed my friends, tried to kill me, and had threatened my loved ones. There was no way he was getting out of here alive. I pulled a frag from my vest and put one hand on the door knob. “Get ready,” I whispered into the radio.

“This Lorenzo man you are looking for, how much would he be worth if I was able to deliver him into your hands?”

Eddie did not hesitate. “He is worth nothing, but for The Prince’s case, I would give you a hundred million dollars.”

“My men will be picking him up shortly, right down the road.”

“If you’re men screw this up and kill him, and I don’t get that case, I’ll hold you responsible.” A small dog began to bark in the next room. Who the hell brings a dog to a meeting like this?

“It is already in motion,” the government man said.

“I hope you realize who you are dealing with, Gordon. Underestimating a man like Lorenzo can be fatal.”

Damn straight.

I opened the door.

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To be continued...
 
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