The Mr. Nightcrawler Trilogy: Book I
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atomicferret
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Meh, It is alright....
darkknight
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great job NC
I ve been waiting for this for the last couple of months. Great story i wish I had a pdf of it right now, the suspense is killing me. 24 and Nc are bad for the heart. I am having a bad day and this made it much much better. I am glad i found this toda and not friday, cause i would have missed an entire weekend due to the fact i would have to watch the thread closely looking for a new chapter.
I ve been waiting for this for the last couple of months. Great story i wish I had a pdf of it right now, the suspense is killing me. 24 and Nc are bad for the heart. I am having a bad day and this made it much much better. I am glad i found this toda and not friday, cause i would have missed an entire weekend due to the fact i would have to watch the thread closely looking for a new chapter.
Nightcrawler
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Quite a few people, last time around, asked me about the true origin of the character, Valentine (formerly NC).
There you go. This isn't a happy story so far, is it?
There you go. This isn't a happy story so far, is it?
Rey B
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Oh Yeah!!
Had connection problems all weekend, just got back up today, making the rounds. Nightcrawler is posting again. Life is good.
Had connection problems all weekend, just got back up today, making the rounds. Nightcrawler is posting again. Life is good.
gyp_c2
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aahh...
...'yer just gettin' spoilt with all this praise
...Back ta' werk, and no more whinin'...
I do like the time and details you're adding to the characters...more is better...
Better sense of humour is cool...although a bit chilly
More Ling...pls...
...'yer just gettin' spoilt with all this praise
...Back ta' werk, and no more whinin'...
I do like the time and details you're adding to the characters...more is better...
Better sense of humour is cool...although a bit chilly
More Ling...pls...
Inverness11
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more please
Ritchie
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WooHoo! This tends to put things in perspective. Just a thought:
“Calm down,” I said into his ear. He struggled some more, but all I had to do was pull on his arm and he quieted down. “I can break your shoulder or I can snap your wrist. Now you calm the **** down.” He was wide-eyed with exasperation and surprise. I held him there for a moment, and the room was dead silent, save for Vanessa’s sobbing.
“Holy ****,” someone whispered.
“This is ****in’ awesome,” someone else said.
“My dad’s a lawyer,” Cory managed weakly.
"Or both" I added.
“Calm down,” I said into his ear. He struggled some more, but all I had to do was pull on his arm and he quieted down. “I can break your shoulder or I can snap your wrist. Now you calm the **** down.” He was wide-eyed with exasperation and surprise. I held him there for a moment, and the room was dead silent, save for Vanessa’s sobbing.
“Holy ****,” someone whispered.
“This is ****in’ awesome,” someone else said.
“My dad’s a lawyer,” Cory managed weakly.
"Or both" I added.
rwc
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Good work.
MrPeter
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WOOOOT! I'm very excited.
I think I'm going to try to wait until it's all written, and I get that magical and wonderful email with the attached .pDF!
I probably wont be able to resist... Who am I kidding
I think I'm going to try to wait until it's all written, and I get that magical and wonderful email with the attached .pDF!
I probably wont be able to resist... Who am I kidding
oneslowgun
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Nightcrawler, the only reason this thread is not already 30 pages long, is that we feel that you already know that we really like your work, and we don't want 36 E-mails about new postings, with no new story postings.
I like your work. We ALL like your work.
Just because I posted this, there are now 75+-100+ E-mails going out. The bad part of that is everyone who has subscribed to this thread, now thinks YOU have posted something new. They, with much excitement will be checking the thread.... only to find... it was just me posting.
We really like the work, we are just trying not to clutter it up.
I like your work. We ALL like your work.
Just because I posted this, there are now 75+-100+ E-mails going out. The bad part of that is everyone who has subscribed to this thread, now thinks YOU have posted something new. They, with much excitement will be checking the thread.... only to find... it was just me posting.
We really like the work, we are just trying not to clutter it up.
v8stang289
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This story is excellent NightCrawler. I find myself continuosly checking the thread to see if anything new has been posted. Keep up the good work.
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wiski
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Thanks NC
I have read all your stories thus far, and really enjoyed them. You are very talented. Thanks for posting them here.
I have read all your stories thus far, and really enjoyed them. You are very talented. Thanks for posting them here.
Nightcrawler
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I *like* it when you guys "clutter it up". I don't mean the "Nightcrawler you're so awesome" comments, either. (I mean, c'mon. I know. LOL )
I like to see people's discussions on what's going on in the story.
For instance, we had what was supposed to be an emotionally wrenching scene earlier, and it didn't get much reaction. I'm going to have to work that one over (the death of Valentine's mother) for the final version...I never did like the way it came out. Something's missing...
I like to see people's discussions on what's going on in the story.
For instance, we had what was supposed to be an emotionally wrenching scene earlier, and it didn't get much reaction. I'm going to have to work that one over (the death of Valentine's mother) for the final version...I never did like the way it came out. Something's missing...
Jalexander
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Nightcrawler, you're so AWESOME!
And your story is mighty cool, too.
James
And your story is mighty cool, too.
James
Billy Sparks
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Yeah one thing about Valentine's mothers death. Two ninja guys show up shot up the place, killing mother and dog. Decker next door is close enough to hear the commotion to come over but no one else does? And he is sitting quietly on the steps with blood on him not worrying that not just anyone will show up??
Gunfyter
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Once again, Life is good.
Technosavant
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Death rode to the quiet suburban house, and dismounted from his horse. While Binky went to gnaw on the bushes, Death walked inside the abode. Standing there looking at her mutilated body was a stereotypical suburban housewife. She looked at Death, and asked "What will become of my son Mike?"
"HE'LL BE OK."
"Are you sure? He's all alone in this world now."
"TRUST ME. HE AND I WILL GO WAY FORWARD TOGETHER."
"Way forward? Oh, like way back. Please don't hurt him."
"IT ISN'T LIKE THAT. HE'S GOING TO PROVIDE ALL KINDS OF BUSINESS FOR ME."
As the housewife's spirit began to fade, Death could hear her say "Then help him."
"I WILL."
At the same time, Death noticed a smaller cloaked figure step out of the bullet-ridden cabinets. It looked up at Death, and simply said "SQUEAK."
Death picked up the Death of Rats, and told him "LET'S GO. THERE'S A PLAGUE BREAKING OUT. MUCH TO DO." They left the house and were riding off on Binky as they saw a couple teenagers coming down the street. Death just looked upon them and said "DARN SHAME. BUT EVEN DEATH NEEDS HIS HELPERS."
Well, maybe that isn't quite what was needed. Copyright stuff and all that...
hacksaw
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What? Me impatient????
Heck yeah!!!!!! Gimme more!!!!!!!!!! This stuff ROCKS!!!! I'm trapped at home with a sick 9 y.o. girl, the guns are all clean and I NEED MORE!!!
tyvm!
I vote for the distinguished Nightcrawler to be the official bard of THR!
Heck yeah!!!!!! Gimme more!!!!!!!!!! This stuff ROCKS!!!! I'm trapped at home with a sick 9 y.o. girl, the guns are all clean and I NEED MORE!!!
tyvm!
I vote for the distinguished Nightcrawler to be the official bard of THR!
Geegolly
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You know, I'm a bit surprised. I'm not getting nearly the amount of feedback my last two stories did. I hope it's not because this is perceived to be of lower quality than the others, since I put a lot more work into it. I don't think so; compared to my others, it's highly polished. Look ma, no spelling errors!
*shrug* Maybe my fifteen minutes of internet fame are over. What ever shall I do now?
(How bout I stop whining and get back to writing? Finishing this story is as much for me as it is for you guys. )
Anyway, Correia's right. The third story, concluding this series, is going to be the definition of awesome. We've spent hours at FBMG brainstorming. Hint: A lot of the conspiracy stuff hinted at in the second story is going to come to fruition.
Eat your heart out, Mr. Clancy. I listen to Coast to Coast AM. I know a thing or two about conspiracies.
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Sorry that I have not spoke up sooner, but this post saddens me. Please do not think that the lack of feedback is due to lack of interest. actually the oppisite is happening. Everyday it seems you are gaining more and more fans. I am speaking for myself when I say that I have wasted atleast more than week reading your stories. Not to many people can say that they have occupied another human beings life for more than a week. YOU my freind are great, and please keep up the great work.
You know, I'm a bit surprised. I'm not getting nearly the amount of feedback my last two stories did. I hope it's not because this is perceived to be of lower quality than the others, since I put a lot more work into it. I don't think so; compared to my others, it's highly polished. Look ma, no spelling errors!
*shrug* Maybe my fifteen minutes of internet fame are over. What ever shall I do now?
(How bout I stop whining and get back to writing? Finishing this story is as much for me as it is for you guys. )
Anyway, Correia's right. The third story, concluding this series, is going to be the definition of awesome. We've spent hours at FBMG brainstorming. Hint: A lot of the conspiracy stuff hinted at in the second story is going to come to fruition.
Eat your heart out, Mr. Clancy. I listen to Coast to Coast AM. I know a thing or two about conspiracies.
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Sorry that I have not spoke up sooner, but this post saddens me. Please do not think that the lack of feedback is due to lack of interest. actually the oppisite is happening. Everyday it seems you are gaining more and more fans. I am speaking for myself when I say that I have wasted atleast more than week reading your stories. Not to many people can say that they have occupied another human beings life for more than a week. YOU my freind are great, and please keep up the great work.
nobody_special
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I came across this thread by chance yesterday... immediately read the "Welcome back Mr NC" story, then read what you've got here so far.
I'm patiently waiting for more.
Good stories... a bit pulpy, but that just helps make them very fun.
I'm patiently waiting for more.
Good stories... a bit pulpy, but that just helps make them very fun.
Nightcrawler
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Well...Decker kinda has to be waiting on the step for our young protagonist to get home. Otherwise, the kid just calls 911, goes through therapy, and probably joins the Army. Interesting drama, maybe, but not that interesting. So some things in the story might make the reader go, "well...I don't know". I try to keep those to a minimum, but I've got to work with the character/setting I originally came up with back in 2004. THAT story was just supposed to be campy fun, so I didn't worry about making it realistic.
So yes, it's quite pulpy. I love pulp.
Besides, Decker is in a little bit of shock. He'd retired to one of the unlikeliest places he could find, trying to get away from his old life, and they found him anyway. What's more, his neighbor of several years was killed as a result. The implication was that Decker was waiting for the kid to come home so he could tell him, instead of letting him just find that with no explanation. Decker isn't an evil man, or even a cruel one. He just got carried away. It cost him.
After all that, though...yeah, he's going to have a smoke. Honestly, in the neighborhood I grew up in, you could sit on the step for an hour and not see a car drive by, that early in the morning. We're talking REALLY small town here, about fifteen hundred people tops.
Decker is usually a cool customer, but he'd gotten comfortable, perhaps? Kind of jolted back to reality. But that's not what's bugging me about that scene. I don't know. Don't be surprised if in the .PDF version it's a complete re-write. I can't put my finger on it just yet...
EDIT: Oh yeah. "45" by Shinedown is, as I've said, Valentine's theme song. "Shura no Hana" (Flower of Carnage), sung by Kaji Meiko, from the Kill Bill soundtrack, is Ling's.
So yes, it's quite pulpy. I love pulp.
Besides, Decker is in a little bit of shock. He'd retired to one of the unlikeliest places he could find, trying to get away from his old life, and they found him anyway. What's more, his neighbor of several years was killed as a result. The implication was that Decker was waiting for the kid to come home so he could tell him, instead of letting him just find that with no explanation. Decker isn't an evil man, or even a cruel one. He just got carried away. It cost him.
After all that, though...yeah, he's going to have a smoke. Honestly, in the neighborhood I grew up in, you could sit on the step for an hour and not see a car drive by, that early in the morning. We're talking REALLY small town here, about fifteen hundred people tops.
Decker is usually a cool customer, but he'd gotten comfortable, perhaps? Kind of jolted back to reality. But that's not what's bugging me about that scene. I don't know. Don't be surprised if in the .PDF version it's a complete re-write. I can't put my finger on it just yet...
EDIT: Oh yeah. "45" by Shinedown is, as I've said, Valentine's theme song. "Shura no Hana" (Flower of Carnage), sung by Kaji Meiko, from the Kill Bill soundtrack, is Ling's.
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